July 9th, 2010 at 09:53pm
Your banner is wonderful! I adore it!
First chapter – It has so much description, I love it. With how you have written this, it flows really well. How the characters speak: ah! It’s fantastic.
“For your figure, I would bargain my soul” Met with the smirk of a hypocrite, and faithful kiss, the man’s eyes slumbered in shadow for a second, before awakening in torment. – This was my favorite line. (:
Second Chapter – “I asked", began the defiled gentleman, with an air of total anguish, “for your beauty”. Stuttering on his reluctant compliment, the cigar between his moist fingertips shedding disintegrating toxins,”
Lover‘s lips once again hung near to seduction, spelling out temptation between the flickers of their mouths.
“Never again. Never again shall I condemn my body to such brutal sadism, nor my soul”, announced the male, placing a solemn palm upon his chest, and taking another breath of violent ease.
Placing a patronizing kiss upon his plump lips, the temptress snickered, with a slight groan.
“Honey, you won’t have to”.
- Wow! This part was really amazing, and the end sentence , made me want to know more.
Third Chapter - So far I’m getting it was set in a different era? I like it though; it has wonderful flow, and amazing description.
this story is amazing.
and with every word you draw me in until i feel like i'm apart of the story.
i love it.
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good work.
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