Human Indulgence - Comments

Wow, this is really well written. It’s like biting into a piece of chocolate and getting double the chocolate. Yum. It’s so well detailed, I feel like I’m not missing anything.

because it is to resign from resistance. To give into temptation is to give into al temptation- I think it should be all?

This was fucking awesome.
So much different than your other stories.
I'm proud of you.
I'm kind of in love. XD

You are amazingly descriptive. Your scenes are so vivid, you can all but see the characters, feel the passion. You might want to take a look at the first paragraph, it looks like there was a mistaken break somewhere in there. There was also a couple capitalization errors as well. A quick read through should fix those minor slip-ups quite easily. =]

worthy^ lol Im not big on spelling =P

Maybe 2 or three places could be separated. And maybe one mistake when introducing his name? Or maybe it's suppose to be like that.

I adored it to the full nothing like any of the average junk around here. It is a jewel, and refreshing a true work worth to be called literary art =] I'm not brave enough to try something like this

No comments?
This must be blasphemy!
Incredible, as always.
Your description simply paints pictures like I've never read before.

And your characters; especially the males, are so real, they are brought to life.
"The eyes of the fiery beauty had transformed into a murk of blazing reflections."
In one sentence, you can see how much of an amazing writer you are.