This is a great story line but the writing not so good. You guys make things way to obvious and predictable. I love the character personality and the idea of the story but how you guys present it in an actual written story is, in a simple way really boring.
I don't know how the hell you did it, but this chapter just did something to me lol It got me so wound up, and frustrated and angry, and no story has ever done that to me before. Eli just got me so annoyed, and I've never felt that bloody strongly towards a fictional character, I just wanted to jump into the story and deck him. He would deserve it for being a prick. But I've read the other comments, and no one else seemes to share me hatred lol So, that might mean that I've misunderstood the chapter due to lack of sleep... But, yeah, it takes a bloody good writer to make me feel that strongly :)
oh wow this was a great chapter. I couldn't stop laughing towards the end :D I feel kinda bad for Riel but I guess Kris isn't the only one with anger issues lol
please, youve kept us waiting enough.
This is longer than he last time
and it breaks my heart /: