Whispers and Wishes - Comments

All I can say is, I want more! I really like this story. The writing, story, characters, everything is enjoyable!
I loved that Nova started to get more traits like sarcasm etc in the end, I sense I good friendship between them if there ever will be another chapter. I know the struggle of continuing something you haven't updated in a good while.

But I hope that you'll return to this story! Such potential within it

Prologue; Read

Wow, just wow. This is very good writing. I can actually see this happening. The window with dust in the ray of sunshine, it reminds me of my grandparent's old, dusty house.

At the end of the prologue, there is an illusion with the girl staring at herself in mirror. Quite interesting.

I can't wait to read more.

this is a beautiful story I like the idea of fae instead of things like ghosts. It has a story of fairy-tale feel to it, and it's sweet. Hope you continue soon ^-^

So I can't read this all in one sitting, sadly, so I'm subscribing on top of recommending! :D I like Aften's character (also love her name). I'm intrigued by this plot; dying to see what her grandmother left her. Your stories are always hard for me to pull myself away from.

I really love your narration here! You've portrayed Aften really well, and her thought-processes are described wonderfully (as is the flow). And I like how you describe her cut-throat family, as well as her interactions with them - Annabelle is adorable.

You are so brilliant! Can I steal some of it? Lol.

So, Nova is so my favorite character simply because there is a subtle feeling of badass to him. Aften is obviously a very close second because despite the fact that she has a magical man willing to grant every single wish that could pop into her head, she still wants to do things for herself!

I like how that even though Aften's grandmother would have nothing to do with her at all really, Aften is very much like her as Nova as said. It's interesting.

Oh my goodness! That jerk seriously cut her brake lines to inherit the house? Aften's family is a pack of wolves; scary. So they are serious enough to kill her, are they serious enough to be her friends? I know Aften is strong will but goodness this is going to be hard for her I think because it's still family. Yikes!

Amazing as usual BJ, you are a wizard with words :) I look forward to both Teal and Whispers and Wishes :D

Still love this <3

This story is absolutely gorgeous. The descriptions flowed so well. The word choice was incredible. Almost poetic. It was incredibly enjoyable to read. The layout is amazing, too. The prologue was nice and mysterious to draw in readers. -comment swap-

I love this story so much :) You have no idea how happy I am that you updated!

Ermahgerd i love this thank you so much for updating how you been doing gurl?

-Comment Swap-

Ohmy. I love this. It's truly beautiful. The descriptions, the vocabulary, Everything. It's so lovely. I love your characters and also the chapter names. Ooof, I'm definitely subscribing and recommending. Keep going! I need more wonderfulness.

I love your title, summary and layout. As soon as I clicked on this I knew it was going to be amazing because of those three things. I'm excited I've gotten two of your amazing stories on comment swap so far.

First thing I noticed though, was that the first sentence in your prologue sounded a bit run-onish.
The old dusty window allowed minimal light yellowed in tint by the ancient panes to filter into the dark attic.
Maybe after "minimal light" add a comma and then after "ancient panes" add another comma? It just seem like a really long sentence to me.

I loved the prologue. You introduced the story without giving away the whole plot or anything like that, which was really awesome. The way you kept the reading kind of in the shadows about everything was amazing.

I loved the first paragraph of the first chapter. It really introduced Aften's character, and set up the whole chapter very nicely. I really like Aften's relationship with Annabelle as well, it's really sweet.

I adore your writing style, you're very descriptive but not overly wordy, which seems to be a hard balance to get. I really love all of your characters too, even if they are annoying or rude or whatever you make them into, you write them so well that I feel like I just have to like them.

Anyways, I'm in love with this story and I've only read the first chapter. Amazing job!

First off, oh my god. This is brilliant! I love it so much. The layout is wonderful, the descriptions perfect. I want so badly to know what happens with Aften and Nova. Actually, the romantic in me hopes a lot happens (;

I love your vocabulary and I just love it. I'm awaiting patiently the war between family and Aften. I just, don't keep me waiting! Please! I'm subscribing<3

Okay, I love this so far! Actually, the prologue is very mysterious with plenty of detail and a fairly large vocabulary, which tends to draw in my attention quickly. The way you didn't even really describe what was going on, keeping the reader in the shadows was brilliant, as they wouldn't know what was going on. I'm definately going to keep reading on; it's a good story so far! Also, your writing style is wonderful; keep up the good work! :)

hey, wow this is is an amazing story, from the opening line my attention had been captured, you have a beautiful writing style, so descriptive and flowing, you are very talented in your skills. This is a very interesting story, i feel sorry for her having to put up with a family like that it's terrible.
but it was a wonderful read keep up the fantastic writing :D
And the layout is simply gorgeous :D

I like the irony of the first line of your summary, "Family was always there." I expected it to go on about how family is so wonderful and supportive, though says the opposite which I find clever. I'm not sure if I liked the rest of the summary though, perhaps it's because I'm not a huge fan of the layout (just one person's opinion, but I don't like the weird yellow, dark green and mauve) or because I found the rest of the brief summary a bit 'spelled out' and obvious, not subtle and intriguing. As for the actual content, I liked your description in the first sentence, though I think the length made it drag a bit. I found the same thing with the second sentence, which I think would be more appealing to read if it were broken up into two sentences: "The cardboard boxes stacked in piles taller than myself had begun to warp with age [FULL STOP HERE]. At my side a locked chest appeared...". < I find that much less tedious to read than one looong sentence. Try varying sentence lengths as they can be great to steer the speed and dynamics of your story

This is a really lovely layout :)

The summary was quite interesting. It was captivating, but I don't really know what to expect at the same time, and I mean that in a good way.

Straight away with that first sentence you just blew me away. It was magical. Just absolutely beautifully written.

The rest was really well done as well, and interesting. Some sentence structures weren't that appealing to me, but I think that's just personal preference and not a case of you doing something wrong.

I think overall you did a really good job :)

Excellent description in the prologue. I love the chapter titles. Yay alliteration. In chapter one, when you say "well, aren't you the prodigal" do you mean "prodigy"? Aften is a really interesting name, and Annabelle is adorable. I don't think "expectedly" is a word, but I might be wrong about that. Ooh, the way Aften's family treats her really pisses me off. The boy at the funeral is intriguing. In chapter two, you spelled "trays" wrong. I adore your description of the outside of the house in chapter three. So good! I have to bounce right now, I have a date, but I will be back with more feedback if you want it! Subscribing. <3

Excellent description in the prologue. I love the chapter titles. Yay alliteration. In chapter one, when you say "well, aren't you the prodigal" do you mean "prodigy"? Aften is a really interesting name, and Annabelle is adorable. I don't think "expectedly" is a word, but I might be wrong about that. Ooh, the way Aften's family treats her really pisses me off. The boy at the funeral is intriguing. In chapter two, you spelled "trays" wrong. I adore your description of the outside of the house in chapter three. So good! I have to bounce right now, I have a date, but I will be back with more feedback if you want it! Subscribing. <3

This story is so amazing. You have absolutely no idea how in love I am right now. I will be waiting for an update :)