Whispers and Wishes - Comments

I love this. But then again, I love all of your stories. I've been waiting for this update! (:

This is extremely interesting so far.

I like how it's family oriented - but in a different way than most stories.
Their obvious greed and competitivity is covered up by fake ties.
And when the grandma dies, I can see that those ties are no longer needed.
It's really sad and sick at the same time, but I'm left wondering where this'll go.

Your talent is amazing, really. You're great at writing detail, but not too much detail.
The whole time I felt as if I was actually inside the story.

The prologue was a bit confusing, since I had no idea what was happening, but it left me wondering.
And that is why I clicked over to the next chapter! Good job with the mysteriousness.

You also have excellent skill with creating well-rounded and faulted characters.
I really enoyed this story!

"That child, if any, did not deserve to be corrupted by or family’s sick games."
This is the only mistake I found. The "or" should be "our" I think.

<3

1.The layout is quite pretty.
The way you write is still really amazing. I think you describe just enough of the setting to lure your readers in but not bore them to death. And I really like the mysteriousness of the first chapter.
Aften, that's a pretty unique nickname, and I think I like it. I want to learn her full name though.
Awww, Anna Banana's so cute! “Are they mad at me?” That's just what a child would think. So adorable.
I love how cruel Aften's relatives seem to be. It's subtle, but it's there. And I also like the little details you put in, like how everyone was holding wine glasses, etc.
What I'd like to know, possibly later on in the story, is what made Aften different from her relatives aside from her “less-than-acceptable” qualities, if any. Like where she gets her strength and courage to be different.
I'm excited to see where this story goes. I hope you enjoy writing it as much as I enjoy reading it. :)

I like this. It's well written and intriguing. :)

Whoa, this sounds really cool! I'm dying to know what the real inheritance was! I'm subscribing!

I am so excited for this story!

Oh, no. She's going to get the inheritence and her family is goign to hate her even more. The foreshadowing is undeniable! Rawr! I love you!

First! I claim comment virginity!

I haven't read it yet, but I'm sure that this will be made of awesome!