Whispers and Wishes - Comments

Brilliant chapter =) Thank you for re-writing them! That takes a lot of effort, i would never have the strength! Plus it was a great chapter, the plot is really started to build now =)

Yes yes Yes yes yes yes yes yes yse

this just keeps getting better and better, and I'm definitely looking forward to seeing where you continue to take this...this is such a fresh story. Never seen anything like it before. :) Plus I love your writing.

The latest chapter is amazing! Finally, we know what's in there. And I'm using "know" loosely. I still don't really get what he is. And who's the person in the car? And, yes. I am enjoying this. :)

yay! you updated! great chapter too - explained a lot =P loving the fantasy twist to it

Happy New Year!

Wow, I really enjoyed this chapter. I guessed right about the boy being the secret! (I usually wrong about these types of things <3) Nova is already one of my favorites, mostly because he is "part fae"--the fae are an addiction of mine, you too?

Nova is interesting, I like the way you've written him out. He isn't bitter like some magical beings are when tied to something like house. I can't help but wonder if he is tied there because of a curse, though he seems to happy for that...He calm banter with Aften was funny. You can tell he's been through this before. :) Keep up the good work!

yes yes yes yes yes yes So happy to see this updated. I'm hoping that updates soon become more regular and that everything is well with you. :)

It's really great. I can't wait to see the reaction her family are going to have, and what she says!
Please don't leave it too long this time, your like the queen of cliffhangers.
Keep it up, your awesome! x

I think I had a mini-heart attack when you ended chapter four with a cliff hanger--which by the way are nothing if not the bane of my existence. You'd be saving me from certain self-combustion, if you update. Soon. Please? I love, love, love the story and Aften, who seriously I can relate with, my own grandmother was the same towards me, while not rich or possibly harboring something supernatural in her attic (she didn't have one, she lived in a trailer park.) she did belittle me constantly, gave me the shittiest toys and my sisters the best toys.

WOW! I'm so sorry that it took me so long to read the latest update and comment. Anyway...

This is amazing. I love it. As Yuffie said "BRILLIANT!"

Great update.
I love your story!

I love you. But I hate you for your cursed use of cliffhangers! But mostly I love you. Haha.

I agree with Yuffie about the grandmother being crazy thing. There was actually a point while reading the latest chapter where I thought "What if there's a dead body in the attic?!" or something psychotic like that, instead of something magical. I also agree with the "Arnold found her collapsed in the foyer" thing because I became unnecessarily tense for Aften because I thought someone was actually there with her.

I was pleasantly surprised that during the first time Aften opened the attic, the secret didn't come out immediately, that it comes out during the second time she opens it. (Right?) I also like that you put a big bird in it instead of a bat like I was expecting. It would have been too cliched if a bat were there. I also love how you reintroduced the wounded palm in the morning, because, like Aften, I actually forgot about it up until that point where her coffee cup made her feel it again.

In short, this was an amazing update. :)

BRILLIANT BRILLIANT BRILLIANT!
Do you need me to say it again?
BRILLLLLLIIIIIAANNNNNTT
Yes, I love this story too much. As usual, your writing doesn't disappoint, and the imagery and emotions are so clear that I litereally feel like I'm Aften driving up to the house, hesitating, etc.

One suggestion that I had was that Emmy seems to come out of nowhere at the beginning of this chapter and the end of the last. Like, you just mention her seemingly for no reason (I know the resteraunt belongs to her cousin, so Aften went there to hide) but I think the addition of Emmy as a character is just extra fluff that the story doesn't need. We know nothing of her, and she doesn't seem like an important character, so it's just complicating and cluttering the story. The story would work out just fine, or even better, without her, at least at this point. If she is an important character, I would suggest leaving her out of the story completely until then, because right now she seems fabricated, and I'm like: "okay... Emmy... why is she in the story again?" Just an opinion! Feel free to ignore me if you disagree.

"...grandmother's [handwriting] on the black-leather..." Handwriting is one word.

I really like how you eased us into Aften thinking that her grandmother was crazy instead of just saying, "She must have been crazy!" You actually showed us a logical thought process that led up to that conclusion. That's really cool! You make us come to the conclusion instead of just telling us. :)

"The human necessity to eat seemed like an evil, unwanted realization that I had to do something; drive away and get food" Such a great line! :D haha. One thing, though, would be to consider just ending it there and take out "or scour the house I had just inherited for anything that seemed potentially edible." If you want to make it sound like she's trying to find any excuse to leave, that would give that sentence a much greater and more humorous effect.

I think you should put "Arnold found her collapsed in the foyer." in italics so we don't confuse it with someone in the room actually saying it. That's what I had thought, but then I realized it was just her thinking it.

And now, some nit-picky things:
"The door that had been directly in my path[,] though, did not lead to a bedroom."
"As children[,] my cousins and I had all tried..."
"part of me had expected the key not to work, [and] that part was completely flabbergasted when it did."
"...as my eyes swept the rest of the room[,] they caught sight of two things on the opposite [end][.] My entire focus was hen centered on..."
"A large chest made of a deep[,] almost black[,] shsade of wood sat in the corner..."
"Reaching in[,] I pulled out the small cloth[] and the book."
"The frong was tied shut by thin leather straps taht wrapped completely around it[;] how I hadn't noticed that originally was beyond me."
"I [shifted], noting the stiffness that coursed throughout my body as I sat up."
"Nearly white strands of hair hung into his face[] and cascaded..."
"...but my palm[] felt otherwise."
"Against the scar on my palm[,] the cool metal of the shaft felt amazing, almost soothing."

CLIFFHANGER? Darn you, BJ! Once again, I have ignored studying to sit and read this story, and it kept me hooked for every word! I honestly don't know how you do it! I'm really excited to know who this glowing boy is and what's the deal with the bird! Haha, that made me laugh. Update soon!

I loved this chapter--and zero to eight, you're amazing!--it was just so magical! I wonder what could be so special about the house and lilacs (love that scent)? You always leave me with questions, missy, and it makes me want to read the next chapter. I haven't got any complaints, and I didn't spot any errors, so nice job! :) You always make me want to write, so I'm going to work on the next chapter of Masked when I get home. :)

wow...amazing update! it all flowed so well and made a lot of sense - lots was revealed but you left us at a cliffhanger!!! *gasp*

i have a gut feeling that this story have a mythical/supernatural sense? maybe ghosts? or dreams...i could write endless things here! i adore this! =) thank you for updating!

You haven't updated this in a long time! Please don't forget about it, because it's a tremendously entertaining story, and I really want to read more. :)

Wow, that's was my first thought after reading the first chapter (I hope you don't mind that I'm putting all of my comments on the three chapters in one.) I like the fact that despite being the first born of the first born, she isn't treated like one would normally think. I also like that she is always just shy of being the top.

Also, I love mysteries (I think this is obvious of my own writing, lol) and you captured my attention amazingly. I want to say the boy with russet hair is the secret, but you're really good at giving hidden twists. I look forward to your next few chapters, and I hope you get many comments on this story as well as your others--they're well deserved of your stories :)

Let me start out by saying that I hate cliffhangers. On the other hand... this is very intriguing so far. I like mysterious boys. :D

Love these so far. Lots of potential. I'm curious as to what is in the attic. And who's the boy? Possible love interest? XD

Must you leave it hanging right there?! I was literally holding my breath while I read. The suspense is killing me! I'm dying to know what's in that house that's so secret, and who that mysterious boy with the lilacs was. He sounds hot by the way :]

I'm loving every moment of this story! Thanks for the amazing update.

Her family gives a whole new meaning to intimidating o.O
Great job,I'm really looking forward to the next chapters ,keep it up!