Dangerous Betrayal - Comments

Love. Love. Love the idea.

I agree with atomika wavve, but the commas and punctuation isn't that big of a deal. It is the awkward sentences and whatnot. If you need someone to proof read feel free to ask:) I would love to help.

Anyways I cannot wait for the next update!

i love it

awsome!!
please update:)

Work on punctuation, some commas seem to be missing.
Also, some sentences are really awkwardly worded.
BUT!
This story is developing quite nicely. :D i like how you're explaining everything first.

Oh my gosh is she really having his child? Her poor mother! Keep up the work I can't wait for another update this is really getting good :)

you should SOO make another chapter!! plzz!!!! :)

This is fantastic I really love this story. I can't wait for the drama to start keep up the good workd :)

i like this story. I would like to see more of their insight. Maybe from robs pov??? Jus saying. Anyways its good. Update soon(:

Seems like an interesting story line, but your grammar could use a little work.

This is so enticing! So...exquisite. I love it!

I loved that chapter. This story really has my interest so far and I can't wait to read more. I would love to know more about her and this Rob guy and how they got to be. Love it, really keep up the good work :)

Wow this sounds really good so far. I have a two shot based off something like this so it was really caught my interest, can't wait to read more. Update when you get the chance. Subscribing :)

I like it so far. I can't wait for the next chapter. This sounds really intriguing and the first fanfiction I've read that doesn't involve a celeb. haha

Love the story so far! I can't wait to read more! Update soon or i'll have my baby sister come to you house and eat your hands of in the middle of the night
lol jk
Or am I? ;)
*I subscribed*

So far I do like this one better, however it's no big deal but there are some spelling errors I just thought that I would point that out to ya....I would like to see more of the relationship growing than what was in the last one....if you want someone to proof read or edit ur work don't hesitate to ask. Update soon and I still can't believe nobody else has commented only me xoxo

I really hope they get together....update soon xoxo

I really like this so far and can't wait for the next update xoxo