Dangerous Betrayal - Comments

You have an amazing storyline but the grammar is really unorganized. You have a lot of run on sentences and most of the chapters point of views seem to switch without you noticing. For example, when it's being told by Maxine's point of view, it switches from first person to third person limited without a set definition. I recommend really looking over grammatical errors because the context and dialogue aren't working very well hand in hand. Otherwise, I love this story!

You have an amazing storyline but the grammar is really unorganized. You have a lot of run on sentences and most of the chapters point of views seem to switch without you noticing. For example, when it's being told by Maxine's point of view, it switches from first person to third person limited without a set definition. I recommend really looking over grammatical errors because the context and dialogue aren't working very well hand in hand. Otherwise, I love this story!

I think the better revenge is if Maxine is truly happy. I wish she can marry (which I hope is to Liam) and have kids to show everyone how happy and complete she is giving her family all that her mother didn't give to her. I hope she tells Liam how she really feels... By the way, you should re-read chapter 8 because I thing you were talking about Loraine in one part and wrote Maxine. Update soon! =D

Can't wait for more

Can't wait for mOre

The new Maxine better! Keep updating! =D

I like it very much! =D

Update!! :D

Love this so much!

I like this one better! =D I want to read moooreeee! =D

Love the story! Way better than what ive been reading lately. I seriously can't wait for the next update :D &by the way definetly subscribing!!

You have a nice story here, cant wait to read more ; p

I hope Maxine can have a happy ending now...... =) Update soon! ^.^

I didn't read the original you wrote, so this is my first time reading it and I must say that I am intrigued. I'm looking forward to reading the whole story!

I have to say I was a bit disappointed that this story is getting rewritten from the beginning.
I was looking forward to see what was going to happen next after the last update.
But I respect your decision on rewriting it.
So far I'm liking it. It shows much more detail on what happened to make her become who she is now.
Can't wait to read more.
I'm a fan of your writing and hope to see an update soon. :)
Good luck.

update soon?

please update soon!
this is one of the stories I actually get excited to read :)

I wanna know what they talked about!!

*sigh* I wish Maxine would get over her stupid obsession and just be happy with what Liam. Buuuuuuut, she will not give up until everything is gone from her... Pity actually, she has revenge on her side. But, I fear for the worst and she will end up lonely free or lonely in jail. I really hope this story has a happy ending?

Question: Is this story close to being over? I hope not, I enjoy it too much!

I loved this chapter! I just want to know what Liam said to her sister. Anyways I don't think Liam is good enough for her if he stays the same way. In the end I just want Maxine happy! Thanks for the update, I really like this new version!! :)

I love it =D please update more (Please don't get Maxine in trouble though =} )