December 30th, 2011 at 03:14am
I loved the frantic, choppiness of this. It added a lovely feel of suspense :)
Even though it was frantic, you still managed to describe everything beautifully :)
This is probably one of the best oneshots I've ever read,
And then when you went on to outline what was happening and still used the short sentences, it gave us a sense of panic, as if the character herself didn't know what she was thinking or even doing, like her emotions were too much to express.
a winter wonderland, I liked this description, it was a dangerous wonderland, one that sparkled but shined danger into your eyes.
I think it could be improve, with certain descriptions and wording, but overall I liked it.