Delta Three Six Alpha - Comments

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First off, I love the layout.
Secondly, this is really original. I don't think I've seen anything like it on Mibba. It'll be interesting to see where you go with this story. :)

Whoo, an update! I just have to say, I could not find any errors in this. Maybe because I was too absorbed in the story. If there was any errors, it didn't affect the reading at all. Your style is perfect for this story. Some of the terms kinda confuzzled me but that's what the dictionary is for. Keep up the updates!

Wicked cool story :)
Very original, war stories are scarce on Mibba, I reckon. At least, I've never came across any other than this one :)
Cool start, keep it up.

All right.
I'm loving the layout.
I think you could make your chapters a little bit longer, maybe go back and edit them a little bit.
I suggest getting a beta reader; I'm thinking of getting one myself.
But overall, I really like this. I'm subscribing.

Stop saying the chapter is bad. If you know it's bad you shouldn't put it up!

AND IT ISN'T BAD. It's actually really good. It's different, and I like it. Keep going.

However, And now Brush was in the brush. How ironic.

I don't think that's irony. I think it's coincidence. Just thought I'd point that out.

Update soon!

I like the layout and the word choice. The detail is also nice. I'm def. going to keep reading. C: Sorry this comment isn't too long; you've left me speechless, aha. C: The whole idea is seriously unique to me. <3

Love eeeet.<3 (:

I love the layout.
The title confuses me, I actually used to understand that lingo.
My dad taught it to me, now I totally forgot.

I remember like foxtrot uniform charlie kilo -fuck. lmfao.

WOO. Anywho. This is really interesting.
I have zero idea what I'm reading, but it's interesting.

You have a natural talent for writing.
I liked this a lot.
It's intense.
Everything was crystal clear =)

This is really different. I was lost though half the time, seeing as I know nothing about war or fighting or...any of that stuff over the radio. None of it. :| But even though I didn't get that, I could picture everything perfectly, you've got great imagery skills! And you can too write.

Liar. You can write. You really can write. I loved this. I love war stories. They always manage to make me cry. I wonder if this one will make me cry as well? Keep it up. I'll suscribe. ^^

I also feel it could be a little more descriptive but so far I'm very interested you don't see this very often.

I find it interesting Id be willing to make a layout for you if you want =]

This is the first army-related fic I'm reading, so it's definitely original. I also love the way you describe things - emotions, characters, the setting, etc. I think the most realistic person - to me - was Bush. I felt really touhed when you recalled the flashback. It felt a littl rushed, but at least it explained things.

Good work. (:

I don't like how there's no layout, but that doesn't really have anything to do with the story.

I think that this is different, it's interesting, and it's definitely going to get people's attention.
There's some little nit picky things like grammar, and the placement of your lines, but other then that there's nothing else for me to critic.
The plot line seems well developed. The only thing I would ask for is to develop your relationships between characters. You see all the time, how soliders tend to grow close to each other, the more time they spend together. Just something to consider.

I still really like this.
Continue :D

It was refreshing to read a combat story, I haven't seen many of those around.
I really liked the anxiety that seemed to pour from this. I felt like I was instantly transported to their hideout in the brush.
I also liked how there's sort of a sense of false security towards the end, just when they think everything is okay, the situation changes in a split instant.
The cliffhanger at the end was also appropriate, it didn't really feel like a "cop-out" as some tend to. It really helped build the suspense.
The only concrit I really have would be to maybe add more emotion. I didn't really feel any sort of connection between the soldiers. The descriptions also seemed a bit forced to me for some reason.

I've never read a military story on this site. So this was nice.

Your writing is cinematic. It's the best trait a writer can have.

Now let's take out some Nazis. >:D Or Arabs. Or...whoever, I guess.

Excited. Subscribed.

Ooh, that ending's great, seriously makes me want more.
Very raw, very energetic; it's also a very unique thing here on Mibba. It's not emo romance, it's guns.

Nice, well written.

Some of them wives, girlfriends or children.
I think this sentence is worded weirdly. I had to re-read it a few times to understand what you were trying to say here. Maybe if you put have in between them and wives.

This is a very interesting story. It is different then what I have seen on here.
The story sounds really good so far. You are a good writer!