Delta Three Six Alpha - Comments

I LOVE THIS.
I've been reading other stories and they haven't really caught my attention. Or if they did, I was just kind of 'eh, this is decent'. I'M SO GLAD someone finally started writing something worthwhile. Your writing is excellent, don't believe what you said at the bottom. And I'm lovin' the setting. Keep up the good work and update soon.

Wow, this is really different!
I like it, you should write more.
The layout is too plain though D: Maybe work on that?
But over all, good job.

only sixteen, fallen victim to the consistent glamorisation of the service by the media. He was a very, very intelligent man. Calling him a man instead of boy surprised me a bit here.

I'm curious to see where you go with this, as I've never read a war based story on here. You may just want a beta to look it over, and help smooth out your writing a bit :)

If you could please comment on this

I think this is very different from anything I've ever read on here. (:
So, great job with originality!
I suggest going to ProjectFiction to get a Beta, to help clean up your writing. I did that, and I improved a lot from before. They're really helpful.
Anyways, the concept is really interesting, and I'd like to see where you take this. (:

I like the plot so far, it's getting interesting.
Your writing is also pretty good, could use some work but honestly, I think everyone's writing could use some improvement (even mine) :P
But anyway, I do really like this plot so far. It's good, you should continue the story.