More, please. I remember the original story before you re-wrote it (twice, I think...?) and it has improved so much, everything from the writing style to the flow and everything. You know when you get excited when you're playing hide-and-seek and you're waiting for someone to come find you, and it makes you have to poop? I got that feeling when I started reading the re-write.
...hmmmmmm I liked it in first, but I think I'm leaning more towards third. it shows more of Jay's motives as well and we can hear from everyone else when Skylar's out. btw, I totally just typed Payson and had to catch myself :P