I love this. I have loved it since the first time and I love it more now.
In chapter 3, I believe, you have the phrase "moment of loss of sight" and to me that would flow better if it was "momentary loss of sight", but that's just me. I'm not trying to be a nitpicker or anything, just saying. :)
I love this story. But...WHERE'S THE REST?! Lol. :)
I just finished chapter 3 and I love it! I hope you get more ideas soon, cause this is brilliant! If you get stuck, I'm always here for a brainstorm, ;) Good Luck! <3
This is amazing! I don't have time right now to read all that you have posted :( For which I am upset... :( But I am looking forward to reading more!! It sounds like an awesome story! :) I can't wait to read more! <3
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK now I'm doubly wanting more. This is officially one of my fave stories right now (I'm such a geek, I have SOOO many faves it's not even funny) and I'm dying to know what happens.
And I about died when you mentioned Harry Potter's invisibility cloak. I love Harry Potter XDDDD
Until the next one, then! And I'm so glad that ^^^ liked my idea lol
I likeeeeeeeeeeee it! Very, very good writing and plot line! Oh my gosh that's such a rarity nowadays it's sad. But you got it, so it's all good! :D
as far as ideas... well, I like their ^^^ idea of taking women away in the middle of the night, but maybe do that after some more plot development? I dunno.
I really, really like this, but I don't know what more you could put in and if you don't have any more ideas I'll feel like crying because it's just THAT good... Maybe soldier reinforcements...? Undercover soldiers that take women away in the middle of the night? IDK but do something because this is really good XD
In chapter 3, I believe, you have the phrase "moment of loss of sight" and to me that would flow better if it was "momentary loss of sight", but that's just me. I'm not trying to be a nitpicker or anything, just saying. :)
I love this story. But...WHERE'S THE REST?!
Lol. :)
Can't wait for more!