You heard me thinking about you today!!! We read part of this play in Actor's Ensemble today called "Most Massive Woman Wins" and it's all about dealing with being overweight and I was like, "*legasp* this is so like Fat Girl!" and yeah xD
New layout - yes. I like it. Though I'll miss the pancakes xD
Anyways, the update, because that's really what this is all about... I like how in depth her thought process is, and how we keep returning to the same ideas, like how it's all Monica's obsessing over. Very nicely presented. Oooh, did you just threaten us with action? :o Gabby, you crazy!
ohhh well i'll just make it my job to remind you. :P (:
the new layout is prettyyyy.
but i'm a sucker for the old one. it was my favorite layout...like...ever. like this story. i'm addicted. omggg. so amazing and beautiful and just. i love you kay?
I like the new layout, but honestly I don't even remember the old one :) either way, it's nice to look at currently.
As far as the story goes; I am in LOVE with the way you write. Maybe I've said this before, but it's kind of...raw, in a way. Like it's just whatever Monica thinks, but it's all worded so beautifully.
Update this shiz. Please. I know I haven't commented in, forever. But I haven't been reading much of anything on here the past couple of months. I really do love this story so much. And really do want you to update it, desperately. Please. <3 You could never make this story go to hell. No matter what you do, it's perfect. It's someones life. No matter what happens; this is Monica. It's her life. What happens, happens. Just like a real person. Because, to you, and readers. Monica IS real. She is a person. She is frozen in time, waiting for you to blow torch the fucking ice she's been stuck in since August. Please update. <3 Monica is freezing to death in her ice block.
I just want you to know that I adore this story, just as I do all of your other work. Your writing style has always been something I enjoyed reading :) I hope you never give up on any story-- including this one.
You're such an amazing writer! This story is one-of-a-kind. I love how it is really realistic and even after the first chapter I established a bond with Monica. Can't wait for you to update (:
So, I was reading The Richardson List (my favorite story on Mibba;D) And I thought I'd check out some of your other stuff And might I say your writing is beautiful, I love how you mold words into pictures Love this story as well:3
Exactly, you should always be writing for yourself I personally don't believe you could "screw up" this story, because after all, your writing choices are your own and no one should control that.
Anyways, onto the chapter. This chapter was just so different, I'm not quite sure how I feel about it. On one hand, the stream-of-conciousness is amazing and fantastic and ah I could rant about it xD But on the other, it doesn't seem to quite fit with everything else. The writing style, I mean. But hey, as I said, it's your story Just a few quick typos I found: It’s all that resides her mind, knocking down ever door and making itself comfortable like the fat on her bones. should be "in her mind" and "every door". a light in the shining tunnel I feel like this should be "a light shining in the tunnel" instead. But... just by itself, this chapter was... interesting. And quite a good trip into a different part of Monica's mind, like, we've already been there, but we're going deeper this time. Love it :D
I kinda like your style of writing, it ends up being poetic...
It's refreshing, and besides, i think it's ok if she's not happy for a few chapters, because it'll make the happier ones cuter :P
Also, i like how you're making Monica sound like the teenage version of Monica from the sitcom friends hahaha, is she going to lose all of her weight, become super skinny and pretty, run a restaurant and make a million new friends ;)
Holy cow chica ya got like a 1000 comments and they've probably said what i wanna say but imma say it anyway....i love this story!The fact that it's so different makes it awesome x10 and the fact that you're an awesome writer makes it 1000x's awesomer.Update soon!