365 Days To Live - Comments

Not much to say about this chapter, but <3 <3
Keep writing, darling. :)

I love the layout and the picture it's adorable! This story is touching and I love it! :)

The grammar and spelling is good. :) All in all, I love the idea and everything within this wonderful story. UPDATE SOON!

I love the banner. The first paragraph of the first chapter was by far my favorite. I like the storyline and concept.

Be careful with your wording. You may want to read over this again and split up some of your sentences.
Truth be told I was scared of going to the doctor I knew that there was nothing wrong with me that I was just sick, but going to the doctor puts all kinds of thoughts into my head.
Would flow better punctuated as:
Truth be told, I was scared of going to the doctor. I knew that there was nothing wrong with me- that I was just sick- but going to the doctor puts all kinds of thoughts into my head.

The story really was good. I'm subscribing because I'm dying to know if your character makes it to the year goal. :D

First off, the layout is gorgeous. The image is very sad, but it fits the story perfectly well. There's some grammar errors, but other than that, the story is perfectly gripping, and extremely interesting. I hope you continue with this, and I wish you the best of luck!x

This is really interesting!

It's a great concept that you develop, and although it could become very cliched, you've written it to be very original.

"So here’s my story on how I was going to live a year, no matter what. I just can’t say this story will have a happy ending. "
This line stood out to me. It's very stark, very harsh and honest and blunt. It's like the narrator is confronting his fate, but still there's this little tinge of hope that he's going to mkae as much of it as he can.

There are quite alot of very minor grammar mistake, but they didn't make any difference to the story. Just have a quick proof read and fix the tiny errors :)

But it really is great!

Yay, Jalex!!
This story really touched my heart, I love inspirational stories like this.
Alex and Jack are so sweet together.
I also love slashes like this, I'm a slash fan so it works very well!
I think the layout is adorable and I love your writing style.
You're going have to update soon, or I will cry.
I love this story, so please do ;D

I have to say that this sounds very good. :)
I don't see this type of story on here that much. I just read the intro but I think I might read all of the chapters. :D
The layout is very simple and pretty. I like it! XD
keep up the great work! :D

I don't think I've mentioned this before but I really love your banner showing the different stages of life, it's cute and sad and true. Your second chapter was good, but it had some grammar mistakes. With a little proofreading you'll be able to pick out what doesn't sound right though and that will take care of that. I like how you showed the relationship between what it looks like as of now, the two main characters. I can see that they genuinely care about each other which is very cute. You're doing great, keep it up!

I don't like the layout much. The photo is quite good though. It captures the feel of the story. Like, every moment is precious? the story sounds very interesting and the title immidietly makes me want to read it. I'm not a fan of fanfics but his is actually okay. You writing style could be improved on. It's slightly cliché and boring. The story itself has quite a good twist to it though so I'm looking forward to more. Well cone!

Seems lie it'll be good. Check your grammar, I know I'm one to talk, but still. I do like it though. :)

I'll just go ahead and say it: I love stories that have plots like this. :) They're always so wonderful and sad. Yet, always uplifting as well.

I really like this so far, even though I haven't read all of it yet. :)

Hi there! so I'm going to give you positive and constructive feedback in this comment right here, so hopefully it will be worth your while.
Positive:
This is a REALLY interesting story.
It's relatable because a lot of people know someone who is battling or has died from cancer. (I am in fact one of those people)
There's a lot you can do with this in the 365 days this story will take place over.
You've put in what seems like a moral almost "Live life to the fullest, you're never promised tomorrow"
I can feel the emotion in this first chapter which is an important set up for your overall story, which you captured well.
Constructive Criticism:
There are noticeable grammar mistakes in the chapter I read (intro) For example in the first paragraph:
Everyone has told me live life to the fullest, that your never promise tomorrow. I always thought I lived life to the fullest, I have done everything I ever wanted to do but I was far from wrong. I always thought like everyone else I would get married one day and have a family; I don’t see that happening now. I was in a band something I always wanted to do that was my biggest dream and I finally lived it. I had someone that I loved more then I could put into words. I could sit all day telling everything I loved about that person and never once repeat myself.

Your never promise tomorrow should be something like 'you're never promised a tomorrow'. When you say 'but I was far from wrong' it seems like it should be 'but I was far from right'. Using the word wrong sounds wrong in that context lol. Your sentence that starts out 'I was in a band something...' should be split into two different sentences. But enough about grammar, those are just some examples. I'm a peer editor for my school's writing center so I'm used to picking out those things. Might I suggest getting a beta? Or just proofreading your story before you post, as the grammar isn't bad, it's just a bunch of minor things. As far as criticism goes, the grammar matter is all I have! (lol grammar matter...sorry just had to laugh at my wording there)
All in all, excellent job! :)

I remember reading this, I liked it a lot :D
I lke how you got that his fans mean a lot :)
it must be kinda hard to live on a bus like that most of the time,
but it would be kinda fun, I have to admit that :D
aww that's so sad, poor, poor Jacko :(
he's not meant to be like this, he's so lively
aww Alex and Jack :) how sweet.
I lke how he's trying to be strong for Alex <3 :)
great chpater, though still sad :(

I really liek this banner picutre, though I'm a bit scared of the title
I have a feeling one of the boys only has that lon to live D:
it's in Jack's P.O.V too :)
but I mean Jack is so lively, how could he die ?
and he knew itwhen performing, dang that would be terrible
brain cancer? Oh no, gosh I can't deal wth cancer, not at all
even though this is a sad concept- I still ike it
it's a really good idea, and it's greatly written so far <3 :D

:(
aww poor jack
I'm glad they r going on Vacay
and wath the fuck
the fans have no right to be pissed
:((
update soon please

aww
poor
jack
and Alex
and
sniff sniff
all time low
sniff sniff
so I was wondering
r u gonna do all 365 days??

awww
I'm gonna cry
both from physical and emotional pai
this is so sad
sniff sniff
I don't want jack to die
every time I read a cancer story
I cry at the end
and I know it's gonna be evn worse this time
since it's jack with cancer
sniff sniff
nd it's so weird
bc the only time I cry in stories
is wen it has to do with cancer
evn wen Alex died in this stor I read
I didn't cry
but I most likely will
if it rly haplened
WHICH IT WON'T
ALL TIME LOW WILL NEVER DIE
NEVER
EVER
NEVEREVEREVEREVERVEVERVEVERVEVERVEVEREVEREVEREVERVEVEREVEREVEREVERVEVEREVERVER

I don't care if it took oh forever to post this
I'm just happy you did
this chapter was awesome
nd I can't wait for more
update soon please!!!!!!!!

I loved this chapter
and I rly love this story
there's just so much emotion behind it
but JIST for future reference
it's Rian on Ryan
just thought id let u know
other than tht
I loved every bit of it

this story is so sweet
I don't want jack to die :(
oh and I rly don't want to be mean but u hve a couple of mistakes
the most common is wen you write "hi "I
like that
it suppose to go
"hi", I and I'm not saying tht u actually wrote hi
it's just an example
but yeah
I love ur story and the way u write it's rly good