SHYNE - Comments

i'm tempted just to mess with you and make you more embarrassed by pointing out you used the terms GRAZING MY THIGHS and WRENCH MY UNDERWEAR DOWN and GROAN and BENT ME OVER but i won't because this chapter was great and i liked the imagery i got from their face paint smudging together and how dylan and felix are in the other room so they better not be too loud ;)

"update soon"

you don't understand how excited i am for the nsfw chapters

(pervert alert)

"i'm taking a shower. alone." ahh i really liked that last line and the twelve year old boy part of me was hoping that the 'nsfw' chapters would land on chapter 69 but that didnt work out but i'm laughing because i actually DO remember you talking about that and at that point we were both so shy and holy fuck didn't i use the word horny and then cringe about it for 39284302 hours? anyways, i still love this story and i wish i commented more frequently on it and i'm proud of you that you've made it this far and it's hard to believe we're already at chapter 70 but this chapter was great and the story is amazing and you are lovely (and so is the gif of yuri in the layout) and i promise a comment on the next updates

Yuri rolled his eyes a little but made me a bracelet and called me princess. this chapter kind of reminds me of whatever forever in the sense that it seems like one of those small little moments that you remember for a long time that doesnt seem very important at the time but you never want it to end. and them all having a picnic together picking flowers is great and this might be one of my favourite chapters

“Dad, I’m sixteen!” she snapped, yanking off her sunglasses and fixing him with a glare that she could only have inherited from me. i love that mostly because i like the idea of her inheriting facial expressions from her mom but also because of the fact that yuri portrayed as a protective dad makes me want to curl up under my bed for a week. the idea is too precious to handle trying to imagine him acting tough as fuck and worrying and wow i'm having yuri feels right now. i'm sorry for being terrible at commenting i never see email notifications for this wonderful story

these always leave me speechless!
every chapter is so real and i adore every character you write

“Is it night-time?”
“You missed the sunset.”
i'm not sure why i liked this small bit of dialogue so much, but i did. i hope cole shows up again soon rereading whatever forever and then the sequel reminded me again of his existence since i'd forgotten about him only because i've been away from tumblr so i haven't been bombarded with pictures of him on my dash constantly. this update was great i can't wait for the next one

a few months ago i went through a rough stage where all i listened to was the rocky horror soundtrack and would constantly say "TOUCHA TOUCHA TOUCH ME I WANNA FEEL DIRTY" over and over and it might be the biggest regret of 2011. but i loved the update i'm glad you're working on this story again

awh i really love this ❁◕‿◕❁
especially cole's part in their life

i wish i could shower you with comments

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okay so first i'm totally diggin' the new picture of yuri, such a babe mayn

and i absolutely love this. i wish i could say more aha. but yuri and katie are so real and wonderful and i want the world for them.

ah it didn't let me finish, but the point was that the movie gives me nightmares and that noise katie did would have scared me just as badly as it did yuri. i love you, i can't wait for the next prompt

oh my god hannah. first of all, i liked the first line where it talks about his muscle tensing because i can feel my muscles tense every time i'm scared shitless about something. i liked the sort of playfulness of this chapter between him and katie and how she was trying to scare him. as much as i like chapters with just her and cole, i like the ones where it's just yuri and katie and everything is much more innocent and not as sad as other chapters have been. AND GOD PLEASE DO NOT GET ME STARTED ON THE GRUDG

I'm in love with this.
For some reason it usually turns me off a bit when a writer gives an actual summary of their story, so I found this story's summary very intriguing. I was really impressed by the first few chapters especially. What kept me interested in the story was the way you showed me what was going on rather than told me. I love the humor in this, and the description is graceful and not overdone. The only error I caught was "Her gaze flicked had from my toes to my face..." in Chapter 16.
Anyway, I think it's brilliant, incredibly well done.

THE YOUNG ONES REFERENCE
hehehofuckinghoho

i just read all 24 chapters
hope yuri is this lovely in real life

my GOD you are a wonderful writer
YURI AND HIS CHICKEN WINGS
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yuri pleskun is SUCH a dreamboat and
your writing is making all my dreams come true

Hannah chapter twenty four is lovely and I have to go now so I can't ramble about it but maybe I will later if I have time. I feel better now that I've caught up on this. And now I feel as though I should try and start writing again..

“Whatcha doin’ Kitty-cat?” Cole demanded, gesturing towards the teetering pile of notes, exercise books, magazines and hospital-issue leaflets and almost knocking them all over as he stretched out on the futon.

Jesus the minute I read that I could perfectly imagine Cole saying that and ugh I don't know now I'm tempted to become obsessive for a moment and look up videos of him on youtube just to hear his voice and see his face because he is precious and I'm still curious to see him with a moustache like you mentioned earlier! And I think because I liked this chapter so much and smiled at their conversation that I don't really have much to say other than I love chapters with just Katie and Cole in them because I think the both of them are lovely and I don't need to go on about Cole (at least I don't think so) and dear god I will die a happy man if I never have to see a baby getting born I actually almost saw it once in a terrible Health class video in middle school but I turned away just in time.

Oh my god I don't think that I ever read this chapter ("her"). I feel as though I would have remembered it, or at least said something about it to you. Was he cheating on her, well that's what I've gathered from it, the whole putting his wedding ring back on it and it seems obvious but I'm finding it hard to believe which is why I'm stating it as a question. I liked the comparing bit, only because I do it myself too often, comparing people and I hate that I do it because it makes me feel guilty. But when I'm speaking with someone, I'm thinking of someone else in the back of my head and noticing how different or how similar they are. But I liked this chapter because it was a flashback /// memory sort of thing and it's making me wonder how long ago it happened, who the girl is, how they ended up being in the situation to have sex, where Katie was blah blah blah etc (etc).

I would say I can't wait for the next one, but I'm about to read it in a few minutes, so that statement sort of means nothing.

Jesus, have I really not left a proper comment since chapter eighteen? Ugh. Okay well this is going to be a comment on chapter nineteen, ok. And now I feel pressure for it to be filled with lovely and wonderful observations but it most likely won't be so I'm sorry in advantage. (and also thank you for calling me charming and shy "but in a good way" it made me smile)

I was pretending to sleep, fiddling with the teddy bear he had bought en route to the hospital.
I really liked that line, because well I don't know it's hard to explain and I just typed out this whole bit but I deleted it because I'm not making any sense, but I liked it okay! And it's sad imagining Yuri cry because of how precious he is and I liked how you wrote that whole scene with Dylan in his arms and maybe not really understanding why he's crying, and having her ""asleep"" while he's crying makes it the sort of sad secret crying. And having her grab his hand was a perfect way to end it and I'm not sure what else to say other than I also really like the layout (but that's a lame thing to say that feels so average) and that I'm a terrible person.

I love you.

And why the fuck in my last comment for this story am I talking about how my icon goes well with my username and age...

I don't know what I'm saying half of the time. (I wrote "have" instead of "half" the first go ugh)