It Starts With Goodbye - Comments

Its no problem. It might be the layout part, but i'm not sure. I mean theres supposed to be enter parts seperating the right parts, but you had it at the wrong spots. Maybe you could try another layout it might work diffrently, I'm not sure.
And its no problem.....

Thank you so much. I actually just noticed that the story looked messed up. I don't know how to fix it. I deleted all the "enter" parts out, but it still won't change. And thanks for the advice on the author comments part. I appreciate that as well. I would like to hear any other advice that you have about my story.

I've been beggining to say this more often. But, I love the plot line...I love the style of fan fiction, but grammar.
There were places in the story where you had obviously pushed enter, and you didn't need to. Also don't put your comments actually IN the story. If you want to put comments like the skittle thing and church put them in the author's comment box.
I'm sorry if i'm sounding rude, I don't mean to.

I'll subscribe though, b/c as I said the plots pretty good.