OMG! This was just to cute. I love Eli, I wouldn't mind having him for a brother! Fernando is so sweet! I love how comfortable he is with her, I don't think I would have been too comfortable meeting someone for the first time. i really loved how you ended this chapter, it really grabbed my attention (not that it was slipping!) So many things are going through my mind right now! I want to know what happens next!
This was great! I loved all your characters, especially Eli and of course, Fernando ;) Eli is so adorable, he's so energetic and so immature! I'd love to be his sister. I think he's very sweet, and i love how he sticks up, backs up Sera. I found it refreshing that you didn't make them the kind of siblings that can't stand each other. You started off great, and you were able to successfully pull me in. There were a couple of typos here and there, though.
“Ola please don’t give me the same treatment like our parents”
“Okay I will try” --> these two sentences need a period after the end.
and He yelled an ok --> "ok" should be O.K. or okay
Otherwise, it was great,baby!
I'm curious about what's wrong with her, and why she wants to keep it a secret. Also, I love Sera, she's an interesting character. I'd really like to find out about Fernando's character, but I'm sure there's more to come. Until then, I can't wait!
p.s. although I'm going to subscribe, can you tell me when you update? I don't check my e-mail too often!