Eyes Open - Comments

I don't usually get scared by stories, but this is seriously creeping me out a little. So kudos to you for writing a decent horror.

Oh my. The imagery in this chapter was just. . . Wow. Seriously.

I couldn't believe he wasn't throwing up when his sister rotted in front of him. But then, with the trees. Just. . . wow.

That was an absolutely epic chapter. Really.

Nate is like his spirit guide! I like it. :D

AND of course that's where you end it. I hate cliff hangers! But they work so very well!

Great chapter!

Agh! C'mon! Really? REALLY!?
Did you REALLY have to leave it off at that cliffhanger? Really?
Whyyyyyyy must you torture your readers so? Why?

So yeah. I have obviously caught up and am quite mad at this cliffhanger.
You need to update. And fast.
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So, I'm liking this story a lot. Like, seriously. It's very good.
I'm liking how you're adding in his real name here and there. It's very clever.
Y'know, reading stories like this honestly make me wonder how something like Twilight got published. >.>

Update soon, yeah? Because if this was for NaNoWriMo 2010, it means you've hopefully got it finished, yeah? :D

Come and play with us, Danny …for ever, and ever, and ever. XD

This was a really creepy chapter. Just the way that his sister acted. So loopy.

Great job!

That was seriously amazing
I'm actually speechless haha

THAT'S WHERE YOU CUT THIS OFF?! COME ON!

I liked the chapter though. It gave a lot of Troy's current thoughts.

At the end i actually had tears in my eyes
As soon as he said that he recogonised the voice i knew it was going to be the one who was calling to him that night
Wow
That is just so creeepy
I'm really really loving this!
Can't wait for more! :)))
Update update update hahaha

So, his sister who's three years older than him, but still only three years old is coming after him with a giant faceless man in the middle of the night? . . . I have to say, that's not a story you hear every day. XD

Great chpater, m'dear!

Holy shit! They've both seen him! I was actually kind of expecting something like, "Troy, I don't see him." XD That would've been so mean!

I really liked this chapter. It's good to know it's not just him. Makes it more concrete in a way.

Just read through the character page and got really creeped out by the little girl...
Is it one of the children he heard and left hand prints outside his room....I'm thinking yes at the moment
The description of her is making me really excited for when her role propperly comes into this story! :)

The characters page is up! :)
I'm not sure if it's been there a while or not though xD I've only noticed it now so i'll have to look in a second
So Nate saw it too!
Troy isn't crazy!! :)
Well...unless they both are
I suppose that is possible in a way...Doubt it though
Oh my God, so he's been seeing him since he was a kid and it all stopped when he met Troy...
Creepy stuff
Can't just be a coincidense (I suck at spelling)
Oh and i remember the theory i came up with after one of the chapters a while ago about it tying into his childhood hehe
That's be so cool is his mum's like
You used to talk about him as a kid...Or something like that
Great update!
I've just got more and more questions now though hehe
Needs answers! This suspence is killing me
Can't wait for more! :D
The facless guy wasn't in that chapter....
Could something big be happening next...Or maybe you're letting it die down for a bit before a big BOOM moment
And i don't know why but i got a feeling that something might happen to Nate soon.
I'm not sure if it'd be something really big or maybe just Nate seeing the 'thing' for himself...Hmmm
Loves. This. Story. Haha

And the ending! WTFrench toast? I'm never going to sleep....

I just can tell some not good enough for your talent publishing company will take your story right up!
I love this very suspensful and I love people with metal disorders such as these :)

BAH! DID HE SEE HIM OR WHAT!?!?! Not a nice place to leave off, my dear. A smart place to end, but not nice.

NOOOOO!!!!!!
Don't leave it at that xD
This is seriously killing me
I want to know what's going on so i need more very soon haha
How does he know what's going on though?
Oh my God i am so confused right now!!!!
Grrrr i want to understand xD
That footage is amazing
Not only had Troy seen it, but he know knows he's not the only one who can...Maybe...
I suppose there's still a chance that this long story could be about Troy being insane and there not being anything there, but i'm really hoping that it isn't that
AN HOUR AND A HALF!
That's beyond creepy and now these things (aka ghostly children or whatever) have whiispering voices AND KNOW TROYS NAME!
If i was him i wouldnt be able to stay there, then again, he';s seen mr big faceless dude outside of his house too....Maybe the only option is to blow his own face off...
Don't make him do that xD
Me is only messing! Hahaha
Anyways
Looking forward to the next chapter
And i've told some of my friends about this now
I think one of them (if she doesn't chose to be lazy) will have a look and really love this, but the other one got a bit creeped on just from me telling her about this, so i'm not sure if she would tee hee
MORE!!!!!!!!! MORE!!!!!!!! ...brains?
Nahh, random hehe

I don't think I've read a story that gives me chills and shivers like yours do. Sometimes I find myself looking over my shoulder while reading because I think somethings there. I LOVE IT!!!! The Slender Man idea is brilliant! Eyes Open is my favourite. I tripped out when i first read it so bad i felt like i was being watched. I absolutely cannot wait for the next update. This is the best late night story ever in my opinion!

wow...That was a long comment lol
But it was on 2 chapters...

OH MY GOD!
I fell behind on this but I'm to date now
Those last 2 chapters were amazing!
It was all so intense and everything that happened really sunk in and had an affect on me
At some points i actually thought i was going to cry! xD
Usually making someone cry is a bad thing, but with this story, making someone do that is something that really deserves a well done

The bit in the fog in the car
Oh god
I just knew something was going to happen.
I expected that when he got out it would've gone though to be honest, so when it moved i was as freaked out as Troy was haha
Creepy....
And maybe he should call the doctor... When i was reading that chapter i thought of something
People who think they see things are generally thought of as kind of mental (in the nicest way possible xD) but how can we be certain that they're just not seeing things that we aren't able to see or that don't appear when other people are around...I don't know, i guess it just got me thinking
This might've happened in the next chapter but I'm not 100% sure so i'll just say it here
The bit with the footsteps really really creeped me out
And i couldn't blame him for all of the paranoia before he went to bed
AND THE DOOR HANDLE! OH MY GOD! Hahahah
If i was him part of me would be glad that i would be away in my sleep if it did anything, but then i was like, what if it gets in? What will happen if i'm knocked out and can't do a thing to stop it
..Just my thoughts :) xD

And that last chapter. One word:
Incredible
Waking up...Thew, everythings normal
WOW, Hold up
...That wasn't like that before
Oh dear
The leaves being everywhere is creepy, like most of this hehe
I wonder how leaves relate to the faceless man, i mean there must be more to it than well, leaves, right?
(my mum just knocked on the door and i jumped outta my skin! Ha)
Back on topic...
As if the leaves weren't enough...Handprints!
If they were just handprints, it'd still be bad, but not as bad.
But when they're children's one's it gets more...Grr i don't know, but it gets to you more
I'm wondering if this 9-10 foot man could have child hands...Or if it could actually somehow relate to a child.
Maybe him as a child! Dun dun dun... (I'm getting carried away again now)
The filming thing was a really good idea.
I watch paranormal activty 2 a while ago, and i think if there wasn't that actual evidence on camera then no one (in the film or watching) would've believed it at all really, but if Troy actually catches this thing...That's be impressive
I can imagine something happen to his footage though, i don't know what but it's never as simple as is it?

The answering phone!
Wow...
As soon as his mum said, what have you done to it? I got freaked out
I imagined it being a voice or something, but when you said it was a high pitched squeaky kinda thing, i was even more freaked out
That's more freaky then a voice in some ways beause of how unnatural it is...
DURING THE CALL THOUGH! WOW
I really didn't expect that
I was getting ready for a calm ending for the chapter, but then BAM!!!
~loud squeally noise thing~
He's at the door!
Can't believe it
Part of me thinks that it might end up being his friend or something, but that might be a bit hard to mistake really. I doubt his friend is anywhere near that pale and tall xD
Great cliffhanger! :)
Neeeeeed
Mooooooore.....
...or faceless man will kill us all...maybe?

I seriously tensed up while reading this. When I read the bit about the leaves, I was SO close to screaming at my computer to tell him to hide somewhere, like the weirdos in the movie theatre who think they can change the outcome of the movie.

GOD DAMN IT! Halfway through reading his narration of the video, and my dog starts barking right outside the window! I nearly fell off the couch! And then my cat starts staring intently at the window, and now I'm afraid to look. XD Okay. I'm gonna look. . . Oh thank God. It was just the dog walking by.

AH! FACELESS MAN IN THE DOORWAY! . . . He should invite him in for tea. I mean, that man's been standing outside his house for ages. He's probably caught a cold or something. *tsks*

. . . I really have to stop commenting when I'm tired. But I feel like it's more entertaining for all parties involved, even if it doesn't always make sense.