Long Road to Ruin - Comments

I practically screamed in joy when I saw your comment on my profile! My favourite Green Day story on Mibba lives once again!

I think Jay's very brave for what he did, I'd love to have him as a friend :)

this is getting really good ! update more sooooon :) & I'm glad that you're still writing this !!!

I have to say, even though I'm on the second chapter, you make the main character so...realistic. Like. In most fan fics, the guy is all depressed and he's like "I CAN'T GO ON!" And then he meets the girl and he's like "SHE'S THE PERFECT ONE!" You make the pain and sadness so realistic, it's like

Woah man.

I;m not sure if there will be a main girl, but I'm positive if there is, you won't disappoint me :3 Now I'll go back to reading :3

I knew it. I've read this before. Don't ask me how this made its way off my subscription list. When I read your journal I remember thinking man, that sounds way too familiar... And I was right! I found my comment on your fourth page.

You really pushed this out there, by the way. I've never had a real story with seven comment pages!

Your writing is still beautiful and amazing. Your description still blows me back to yesterday and I'm still completely jealous of it, haha. Even re-reading your first chapter has sucked me back into the story and once I get home I'm going to finish reading the whole thing. I'm excited to read more. :) You really did capture me again!

GAH! I'n hanging for an update! more!

Your layout is amazing and it made your story easy to read which is always good! As a person who lives in a big city (Philadelphia) the background reminded me of how huge life is in the scheme of things and how easy it can be to lose your way, much like Billie Joe has.
Chapter
I sat on a mahogany park bench, looking up dreamily at the star-studded sky above me. A slight wind whispered, giving the fallen leaves the little push they needed to be swept across the sidewalk.
Those first two sentences were beautiful. When I read a story I look for a lot of imagery and you certainly know how to paint a mental picture!
I really liked this line, People I had never met knew me by name, knew my birthday, my favorite color, my family history. It gives insight into what it’s like being the famous person that so many people stalk or know everything about. We don’t always think about what it must feel like to constantly be watched like that. I’m guilty of possessing a large amount of knowledge about several bands but aren’t we all? :)
I think you also ended the first chapter in a great way that provides a transition for chapter two.
Chapter 2
I may be a rock star, but I do have a heart, and it was breaking at the thought of what I had almost unknowingly done to my wife and children. That line was quite powerful and made me feel a little pang for Billie Joe. Even though he’s a rock star, he must still face the consequences of his actions.
I’ve actually heard that coffee doesn’t sober you up, but I wouldn’t know so that may have been a myth lol. I like how you had Mike run after him and discuss the situation with him.
This is great so far!
Chapter 3
Something I think I’ve failed to mention yet is that I love your vocabulary. Seeing words like reluctant, disarray, etc, make me smile instead of just seeing the standard “I didn’t want to” or “messy.” Once again, I like your adjectives and imagery. I feel as if saying that his memory of Chicago was charred was probably the perfect way to put it and also how the tension in the room was tangible.
Oh dear, airplanes terrify me haha. I’ve never been on one and I am too afraid to do so which is a shame because I really want to go to England and other places. Hmmm, a text message. I wonder who that could be from? Time to read on!
Chapter 4
Oh geez :/ She senses that something is wrong. I thought that providing Billie Joe’s innermost thoughts along with the actual conversation was a nice touch. We all hear that little voice in our head when we’re lying and fictional characters should certainly be no different!
Billie Joe seems so lifelike in this...like I'm in his life during the chapters, it's amazing.

I can tell that you’ve worked very hard on this story and I thoroughly enjoyed it. I have to catch up on this and I’m going to subscribe :)

Omg, i love it!. I know i said i would read it sooner but haha you know me :) but this is really good. you better, YOU BETTER update :) I really like this :P

Yay! That was awsome. There is so much depth and... and power behind the written word, well.. Typed word in this case, but still keep going

Okay, I haven't seen a green day story up here in a while. At least a good one anyway. This was amazing. And I just read the first chapter. Which means, I will be reading more right now. lol

I love the way you described everything. You weren't too graphic when it came time to Billy to cheat on his wife. Which I respect since people don't really know how to do it. I love how it feels like it's actually his story. I mean, you had to put yourself in his shoes to write this. This story is pure perfection.

I hope you have more amazing stories because this left me twitching. It's like my drug now. :p

I'm gonna go get more before I sober up.

LOVE IT! you're such a talented writer!
If you're getting non Green Day fans to read this with a huge curiosity then well done you! Could you sit my English Exam for the Context bit? I'd love to write like you!
Keep it up!

Oh, and the new layout & banner are awesome!

(LottieNightmare here!)

Aww, Jay is a real stand up guy, despite being punched in the face by Billie...he could even say that it's a little trophy if anyone asks, though probably not a lot of people would believe him :)

I really like this chapter, especially how you've described Billie's frustration at everything.

I was instantly drawn into this chapter, can't wait to read more :)

So i read it and i like it. But as always, i'm dying to know what happens next! I really hope you update soon! In fact, i'll text you as much as i can and bug you at work to update! Lol! How does that sound to you? Lol!

Hello! You’ve written a story about one of the members of one of my favorite bands. ^.^ And it’s very rare that I’d read a bandfiction but from the summary, it seems like this would be one of those rare realistic ones.

The layout is very nice and it sets the mood for reading the story, as does the summary. :) And that banner is really nice! :O

Chapter One:
All I have to say is, “Wow.” I never knew Billie would actually do that sort of thing but then again, from the mood and tone you’ve set for him in the story, it’s understandable. We all do things that we regret when we have no sense of identity.

I really love how you’ve gotten into Billie Joe’s head and managed to pull off this chapter! I could never write bandfiction, let alone this master piece. You dsiplayed such an image that I am imagining seeing this entire chapter happening before as if I were in his shoes. I feel bad for him, because he doesn’t know who he is. But I feel slightly worse for his wife.

You did a great job with this chapter.

Chapter Two:
Awww, this really sad. Billie Joe feels bad for cheating on his wife, even if he didn’t mean to. He has a lot of dedication for his wife, which is really sweet and touching. It takes a lot to make me cry but this story has me almost in tears. This is one of the best bandfictions I’ve ever read. It’s probably the only one I’ve ever read so far. :)

My favorite in this chapter is where he was thinking about his wife and describing her in his mind. That there is real and true dedication.

Chapter Three:
This chapter has the most amazing details. I kinda wish it had more interaction between Billie Joe and the Jasons but I’m sure you’ll get to that in the other chapters. It seems like Billie is handling himself well for now. :)

And as a random side note, I don’t think I could ever fly on an airplane. Lol.

Chapter Four:
I really loved how Billie Joe was led into a false sense of security until his wife called. Ooh, that… I don’t know why but I was at the edge of my seat, wondering how everything will go. Will Adie forgive him? How will Billie Joe emerge? Of course, I’m in the middle of the chapter right now and the suspense is mounting. :)

“I will…I have to,” I sighed, “And I know that. But this scares the hell out of me, Mike. I know that I’ve made a mistake, possibly the biggest one I’ve ever made. I want to fix it, but what happens if I can’t fix this one? I love her with everything I have. We’ve been married for sixteen years, and I’m thirty-seven years old now. I’m too old to try and start my life all over again. What if she won’t forgive me?”
^this is the most touching part in this chapter. I really like all the emotions that are displayed in this paragraph. It really shows how dedicated Billie is to Adie. Forgive me for not adding “Joe” to his name as it should be.

I feel annoyed at Billie Joe for not telling Adrienne at that moment about what he had done but then again, I don’t blame him. And in my opinion, it’s always best to tell someone straight to their face in real life anyways. :)

I really loved this chapter, Visions. :) I know I agreed to read this entire story, but I promise I shall get to the other chapters tomorrow. It’s kind of late right now but thank you for the wonderful read and I will come back for more! :D

Whoa! Did not expect Jay to show up OR take the fall for this. Crazy update!

good update I loved it :) !!!!

Damn, it's like Billie and the prostitue have switched lives - Billie now on the verge of losing everything & the prostitue in a highly paid, respectful, professional job.

I just want to take Billie in and help him get back on his feet...he needs someone stable to help him I think :)

I've REALLY missed this story, like SO much!

I'm glad that it's been updated again and I can't wait to read more :D

I don't read that much GD fanfics. In fact, if I recall correctly, the last GD fanfic I read was about two years ago.

This story is plain amazing. Your writing-style is amazing. And I love your details and the way you describe the surroundings through Billie's POV. I can feel like I was there, which is amazing. You character is just so realistic and it really makes me jealous. The way your words flow are just natural and don't seem forced out which again, makes me jealous.

You really did a wonderful job on this story.

I'm not much of a Green Day fan nor do I really like fan-fiction. This however, is pretty amazing. I never really thought about how a celebrity must feel when people they've never met know everything about them. I imagine it would be pretty easy to lose yourself. I really loved the scenery descprtions, but all your details where rather on point.

awwwww snap!! Can't wait to see what happens.Also- super thrilled to see the update :D