Blue Moon - Comments

Hi! I'm such a sucker for romantic and sappy story lines so I really enjoyed this. Sure, it was extremely sad near the end, but tragedy makes for great storytelling. At least in my opinion. I'm happy I read this when it was completed and not while you were writing it. Your author's notes reminded me so much of me when I write sometimes. Sometimes you just lose that inspiration that first sparked your story and sometimes you feel like you just aren't making it good enough. I like that you critique yourself like that because it shows you care to make a great story.

One thing I would suggest is to watch your grammar a bit. I'm not the greatest with it either, so I don't mean that in a hoity toity way. It's just small things like your use of your/you're, they're/there/their.

Anyways, love this. I'm probably going to be checking out your other stuff! :)

I really like this story! It's well written and it's kept my attention for ten straight chapters now, it's such a page turner! You're an incredible writer!

I really like this story! It's well written and it's kept my attention for ten straight chapters now, it's such a page turner! You're an incredible writer!

I really like this story! It's well written and it's kept my attention for ten straight chapters now, it's such a page turner! You're an incredible writer!

I liked your story, you're characters were interesting and your plot was cohesive. Going forward be careful of how many times you use said. It's rampant through the first chapters. It doesn't really add anything and instead detracts. Also, be aware of gerunds. But, overall I think you have real talent and I look forward to reading some of your other work.

-Rosi

Blue Moon,

I liked your story, you're characters were interesting and your plot was cohesive. Going forward be careful of how many times you use said. It's rampant through the first chapters. It doesn't really add anything and instead detracts. Also, be aware of gerunds. But, overall I think you have real talent and I look forward to reading some of your other work.

Blue Moon,

I liked your story, you're characters were interesting and your plot was cohesive. Going forward be careful of how many times you use said. It's rampant through the first chapters. It doesn't really add anything and instead detracts. Also, be aware of gerunds. But, overall I think you have real talent and I look forward to reading some of your other work.

:'0 It's absolutely horribly she cant have any children!!!

I love this story! It is just awesome. You did have quite a few technical errors, but other than that it was great!

Mer, I'm part of the comment swap. And I have one issue with your story- you have quite a few technical errors- I love the first and second chapter though, a lot! The story line is really cool and I adore your page layout. I'm on the third chapter now- I'm def going to continue reading!! Good work. (:

I'm here from the comment swap and I am going to start at the beginning! First off, your layout is very nice. The font in the beginning is a little hard to read but I can read your chapters, so that is fine! Your summary had me hooked and it was very nice and simple.

Starting off you have a lot of grammatical errors. Easy to fix, but easy to spot as well. I suggest re-reading your chapters so you can spot them ( I am not the most grammatical and I make soo many mistakes) but you have a lot of comma issues and "your/you're" issues.

I actually liked the first chapter! You get introduced to the main character who is stubbornly charming and you introduce the main story line as well with her eavesdropping, which is nice. Going on reading into chapter three, I like you develop your characters - the stable boy and her, her and her mother, etc. I think you have a really solid story here and it seems like you've done a good job. I really like your writing style and this plot line has so much potential! I am going to subscribe so I can remember to come back to read :)

HI hi cant wait to read the next one :)

Comment Swap:
So I only read the first three chapters, but I like the original plot. The story itself is really interesting. You give enough detail for the reader to use their imagination, which is really good with a science fiction such as yours. However, you might want to proofread a little more. The grammar is a little off, especially in the dialogue. But I applaud you for writing a werewolf story and making it creative rather than stupid!

I still love the detail in this story. It's really a strong and original plot. Great job on that.

I read and read....and then BAM...

:( the last chapter you put is so....depressing.

Is this all???

Obviously all writers go through writers block. It's an inevitable part of being a writer. You're a very good writer and in all honesty, I wish I could write like you do. Everything in this story is so descriptive, I can quite literally, almost see the characters. Their expressions, how they talk, and move. I've read some things that are very good, but I think that this is the best by far. I would love to read more. Please update soon! =)

This is great!!! I think it's cute and the drama is great!! Will. OMG. The hotness of being a werewolf. Lol. Anyways. J was very surprised you updated this. You better not have us wait so long for the next update!!

I really like it! Hahaha and as for people saying it's cliche. Sometimes, cliche is good. People have gone out of there way to make something not cliche that cliche has become the new different lol Keep it up. I'm hooked!

Very cliche, though in such a good way! It really played on old cliche stories of finding one's true. I like how descriptive you are, it's not overbearing; it's just enough to draw me in and keep me wanting more.

Also, I must applaud you on your dedication to this story!48 chapters! That's a LOT of writing and takes skill to do. I haven't gotten that far myself in a story yet, maybe one day!

Otherwise, a good story plot with likable characters and a very good author!