Whoo! I was waiting for that kiss all chapter. You made me feel as if I wasn't going to get it. But then I did and for that, I am eternally grateful <3
Hurry and update! I wanna know what 'it's on' means. It sounds like something I like :)
when i first read the summary i was worried i was going to hate but i thought i'd give it a chance an i'm so glad i did. i was reading an earlier comment about how this didn't happen and this is 2011 but it does still happen especially in the deep south. i've been to stone mountain monument and in one of the all white, rich, confederate flag waving neighborhoods- trust me they are racist and sexist (not to say that being from the south makes this way i just know there are places like this in the south).
So I just read you update for Chap. 9 and though it was short it was still VERY good. I'm excited waiting for your next update. I really appreciate your chracter Chester, because I think there are kids like that everywhere and I'm glad you showed that some white people like to be like black people too. All your chracters I can seem to find someone I know to relate to them so thumbs up on that! But I've got this 1 PROBLEM: I just can't picture Troy, I know that he's big and black but I can't picture his face. Do you have chracter pictures? I really like to be able to see the chracters when I read, so even if you just mesage me and describe him... That'd be good. Thanks! I love your story anyways though :)
I just started reading this and I love it. Where I live there is racism but it's also very ethnically diverse. I love how you don't bother censoring any offensive terms. It makes the story honest and real. I think Troy and Liam are just soo cute! I'm glad Liam finally admitted to having feelings for Troy. This story is amazing, can't wait for more! <3
I love this story so much that I recommended it to my buddy, Nicole, whose username is Nytestalker Even though I absolutely adored all of this, I'ma focus on the kiss. Because obviously, that was my favorite part :D
I love that even though Liam still thinks ethnic slurs in his head, he openly likes Troy. I just think it’s hilarious that he can go from saying, “I caught him doing a black victory dance down the street.” to saying, “We both had feelings we knew we had about each other; it didn’t need to be discussed any further.”
But I found a little tiny error in the last paragraph or so. I know it’s hypocritical of me to point it out even though I said that I didn’t care about those things, but I think that maybe you’d want to know. So:
Troy, suddenly looked constipated, leaned forward awkwardly, and gave me a quick goodbye peck straight on my lips.
I think it should be: Troy, suddenly looking constipated, leaned forward awkwardly and gave me a goodbye peck straight on my lips.
It’s just the way the commas are – no biggie. I feel kind of bad for pointing that out though. Like, I feel all snobby.
Have I ever mentioned how I love how much detail you put into this? Because I do. A lot.
Okay, now I’m going to gush about the kiss! I love how you described it so perfectly. Instead of saying something bland like:
We kissed, and it was like fireworks.”
You put in some detail, like about the shock and Liam seeing Troy’s “bushy, black” features up close. And I think it’s charming that they both tasted like curry :3
And I can relate to Liam. I always smile stupidly around crushes, too :3
Update soon? And yeah, it’d be great if you could notify me. Mibba doesn’t have a thingie where you’re notified when your friends’ stories are updated. I mean, sure I’m subscribed to this, but I never check my email.
i am i love with your story first of its completly and utterly amazing and it is so well written it is not to racist or one of those flambouent gay slashes its a nice story keep writting ill keep reading!!
You are a god. I really wish I could say more but I'm physically incapable of writing more than that. This story is so good and true. You have surpassed my realm of comprehension. Which could be perceived as a bad thing but I assure you, it is not.
That kiss? It made me want to hug you. So so much. It was....mind blowig. You blow my mind
Go Troy!