May 20th, 2011 at 01:36am
More?! please?! I LOVE IT!!!
Sincerely,
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♥a.k.a. Aubrey Rose♥
On the Outskirts of Manhattan - Comments
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May 20th, 2011 at 01:28am
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I figured it out. I was freaking out for this whole chapter thinking about how I don't have very many comments and how people must just hate this chapter and not like the sequel, but then I woke up this morning, and saw your comment and suddenly everything is better. I think it's because I associate your comments with a chapter being complete.- MarriahShadows:
- This first chapter was sheer brilliance. I loved it. The descriptions, the emotions, the whole feel of it was simply fantastic. I am not gonna lie when I say I would have yelled out loud when I saw that this was up, except I was in a public place when I saw and I had to refrain from cheering out loud. But I seriously couldn't wipe the smile off of my face.
Anyway, even though the chapter was short, I thought it was perfect as an introduction to the story and the events that are going to happen. When I saw that bit about rogue wolves going crazy, my stomach kind of knotted up. I am so eager to find out what's going to happen
I loved how there was very little actual dialogue at the end of the chapter.
But why are the rogue wolves going crazy and attacking?
When I read about the men in black suits, I immediately thought of the Men In Black movies and how their job is to control aliens and your men in black (along with the council) are in charge of wolves, I don't know, I found it funny. :)
The Werewolf Council, more commonly known as the Council, was a powerful group that comprised of five werewolves feared by all. These five men were both feared and adored; loved and hated. They held every secret you ever revealed and knew your mistakes to come. And when that mistake came, the Council would deal with you accordingly.
Once the men in black suits came, your life ended.
I loved those parts.
Okay, I'm done now.
Looking forward to the next update. :)
...That being said, I hope you don't feel obligated to comment on this all the time now. lol.
I'm glad you like the prologue. I was concerned that people would be like "Where's Ava? This is crap." But the people that have commented seem to have liked it as a first chapter. Which I'm glad about, because I like it too :) Although, I feel like people are looking too much into the whole rogues going crazy. lol. Riley did call them all in at the end of the chapter, after all.
I don't particularly like dialogue... So during prologue's I usually have little to none.
Rogues being crazy and attacking will be explained more in the first official chapter.
I was thinking about Men In Black when I was writing about the men in black suits. Ha ha. But not because I was modelling them after it, but because I called them "men in black suits".
I also enjoyed those parts :)
I will post my next update once I finish writing a different chapter :) Trying to keep my pre-written chapters at the same amount. I'm glad you like it, and that I feel better now :D
Sunny-Lee <3May 18th, 2011 at 08:52pm -
This first chapter was sheer brilliance. I loved it. The descriptions, the emotions, the whole feel of it was simply fantastic. I am not gonna lie when I say I would have yelled out loud when I saw that this was up, except I was in a public place when I saw and I had to refrain from cheering out loud. But I seriously couldn't wipe the smile off of my face.
Anyway, even though the chapter was short, I thought it was perfect as an introduction to the story and the events that are going to happen. When I saw that bit about rogue wolves going crazy, my stomach kind of knotted up. I am so eager to find out what's going to happen
I loved how there was very little actual dialogue at the end of the chapter.
But why are the rogue wolves going crazy and attacking?
When I read about the men in black suits, I immediately thought of the Men In Black movies and how their job is to control aliens and your men in black (along with the council) are in charge of wolves, I don't know, I found it funny. :)
The Werewolf Council, more commonly known as the Council, was a powerful group that comprised of five werewolves feared by all. These five men were both feared and adored; loved and hated. They held every secret you ever revealed and knew your mistakes to come. And when that mistake came, the Council would deal with you accordingly.
Once the men in black suits came, your life ended.
I loved those parts.
Okay, I'm done now.
Looking forward to the next update. :)May 18th, 2011 at 08:14pm -
I'm glad you liked it! :D I also like when stories start off action based. It gives the reader...something. lol.- JamieJo:
- Yaaaayyyy! This was such a good introduction! It really set the story up amazingly, I love it when a story starts off with action because I'm kinda an action buff haha! Oh, and I love the picture you have on the layout :) <3
I really liked how you described Joshua and his "tiny red demons", the part about him going crazy I guess over the husband and wife and their baby was so creepily good!
I can't wait for more <3
I'm alo glad you liked the tiny red demons. I was unsure about that because it felt like I was going too in depth about it.
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Sunny-Lee <3May 18th, 2011 at 04:19am -
Yaaaayyyy! This was such a good introduction! It really set the story up amazingly, I love it when a story starts off with action because I'm kinda an action buff haha! Oh, and I love the picture you have on the layout :) <3
I really liked how you described Joshua and his "tiny red demons", the part about him going crazy I guess over the husband and wife and their baby was so creepily good!
I can't wait for more <3May 17th, 2011 at 09:54pm -
YAYS! Woot to random updates :D Always love them I tend to squeal when I get the emails teehee anyways I can't wait for more!!! :DMay 17th, 2011 at 05:30am
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OTOOM IS HERE! :D
I loved the description of the "tiny red demons." It was creepy... but created an amazing visual. Joshua (in my head) seemed like a pretty attractive guy... until he went ballistic. But then again, I picture all werewolf people to be kind of scruffy, muscular, and attractive.
I'm excited. I want to know why rogue wolves are going on sudden mass murder sprees, but I'm sure there will be more to come.
I love it... and for a split second my Riley popped into my head--but I morphed him into your Riley. ^_^
Great job, Sunny. I can't wait for more. TEEHEEEEEH.May 17th, 2011 at 02:00am
Sunny-Lee <3