Hoping for Disaster - Comments

You know what one of my favorite parts about this story is? You both manage to capture both personalities so well, even though you each write from one character. Both Morgan and Reid were done so well in this chapter; I loved Reid's spouting of statistics, it seemed completely believable. I also love how you mentioned Hotch calling Jack; I barely ever seen it on the show so it was nice to have it referenced. Basically, I loved this chapter and I cannot wait for the next one. :D

Oh yeah. Keep this coming, PLEASE.

Love the new chapter!!! Absolutely can not wait for next chapter

I know I can't compete with the other comments before mine, but I want you to know how swell this story is so far!

And I hope that maybe just a little bit that my comment made your hearts melt (:

Anywho,
Update soon please?

So, I absolutely adore Criminal Minds and I adore this pairing, but it is so hard to find stories with them. Therefore, I pretty well fangirled when I saw this on the Pimping thread and now I'm just going to stop rambling and read the freaking story.

First off, I love the case you've created right off of the bat. It is definitely something unique and it seems like something they would use on the show. I'm glad that I no longer believe in Santa Clause, because that would probably traumatize me for life. Also, I really enjoy that this is taking place after Emily's death. That'll add an interesting angle to the story.

Acid Milk, I think you did a great job at writing from Spencer's point of view. I know that it can be a pain in the ass, since he's such a unique character, but you did a great job. It seemed completely realistic.

Same goes for you, Unpretty! I liked how you gave us some subtle detail in Derek's past with just that one encounter. I also like how, with Morgan's character, he's emotional but he's still kind of macho, if that makes sense. It still seems completely realistic and compatible with his character.

“And you repaid me with your arbitrary and egregious mannerisms.” For some reason, that line made me laugh really hard. It just sounded so much like Reid, when he is being accidentally hilarious. That's probably my favorite bit so far.

Basically, I'm really enjoying this so far and I cannot wait for more. Also, I adore the banner photo; it is just the sweetest thing. <3 I'm going to subscribe now!

Ok i have just read the first chapter and i gota say i FRIKIN LOVE IT!!!
Im a HUGE Ciminal minds fan, and i think you capture the essence of the show perfectly!! :D
Im sad that you only have four chapters up and that im already nearing the end :(, i do hope that you post more soon PLEASE!!!

The tension between them makes me giggle. :)

I really love this story so far. I am a massive Criminal Minds fan and these two are my favourite. I love what you've done with the characters, it seems very realistic to me. Can't wait for more updates!

As an avid Criminal Minds fan, I loved how you put that quote in the summary of the story. Just because in every episode, there is a quote (... as you probably know, considering you probably watch it too, aha) and then having a quote is just this awesome connection that I really liked.

I never actually thought of them together, but maybe this story will change my mind? :D

Oh my god. STRANGER DANGER. STRANGER. DANGER. I'm seriously debating whether or not I'm telling my kids about Santa Claus. These things happen when you do.

How... gruesome, but I'm really wondering about the entire reasoning behind it, it's one of my favourite parts about the entire show, the psychology part, aha. The relationship between Spencer and Derek is a nice one, though. :)

I'll totally be checking back for this, it's got a lot of potential and as a lover of criminal minds, I'm totally into this.
:)

A pretty, simple layout. The picture itself is perfect, with the two sleeping men, however I don’t really like the patterns over it =/ I love the title though; definitely makes the story seem interesting and like there’s going to be a lot of drama, perhaps even self-destruction involved.

Chapter 2
I like how you don’t bore the reader with too many descriptions and only focus on the key details that help create the character or plot.

Try not to use clichés. I don’t mean in your story-telling because the plot seems to be developing quite well (I enjoy how you have the murder plot and a more subtle storyline that seems to be about Derek in the background), but in the actual way you write it, such as I shook it off, making a mental note to ask him about it later. Reading the same lines over and over in stories is tiring and loses the reader’s attention.

I have never watched the show this is based on if I’m honest, so I don’t know the characters at all but I really like how you have portrayed them. I found I familiarised myself with them quickly, which isn’t often the case when reading fan-fiction of unknown characters.

After years of working with the BAU, I still found it difficult to understand the strong emotions a crime scene produced. I supposed they were a mixture of everything- empathy, dismay, and revulsion amongst the strongest ones. Good to put this part in, it shows vulnerability and realism. Many people would assume this being someone’s job they’d be used to it, but it’s a nice touch showing that it’s not the case. Certainly makes your characters more human and easier to relate to.

Derek simply nodded his head in inclination to the validity of the man’s observation. Sometimes making sentences or your vocabulary over-complicated is just too much, bordering on ridiculous. ‘Derek simple nodded’ or even ‘Derek nodded’ would be just fine.

I pointed out, finally finding myself able to speak. Once I started, I couldn’t seem to stop, though, feeling an undeniable need to make up for my error before. Fantastic characteristion. Have you heard of ‘show don’t tell’? You did that very well here. I can see your character doesn’t like to make mistakes, is perhaps a perfectionist and thinks a mile a minute. I also like how it’s both this character and Derek acting out of sorts in the chapter – nice correlation.

Really intriguing development in the main plotline. With the teddy bears. Very strange. Not just a straight up murder and interesting in a psychological manner too. This seems to be going really great. You’re obviously working hard and should be happy with it. :)

oh a Criminal Minds story :) I have not read one of those yet :D! <3
and I love the fact that Morgan is in it, him and his sexy ass self ;) haha
ugh i hate that feeling when you're scared in your own house
like someone is there when in reality nothing is there to hurt you
especially since Darcy is scared, he should be nicer to his little sister!
but I still know how you can get annoyed with your siblings really easily haha
aww she thinks its Santa Claus :) she must be pretty young then haha
I really like how you set it up like an episdoe, where the beginning of the mystery was the beginning
at first i didn't get the transition, but then I realized it was Spencer and Morgan :)
Garcia! I'm glad you got her in there, she's such a quirky person, i love it :)
so only two were killed , and one was not? I don't get that much.. but whatever
i like how Derek calls Reed pretty boy haha i do like that :)
Great first chapter, you're a very good writer , no lie :)

OH YES!
I love it ;D!!!!!!!!!!!
You have Reid and Derek down pat, Hotch I think is almost perfect, just a few things I have a hard time picturing him say, but I'm pretty sure he's done it so no complaints. You're doing a wonderful job and I'm truly interested...
I like how you ended it showing how locked up Morgan is... He's always so secretive, unable to let anyone in, and you can always tell that he's afraid to do it, but you have to respect his boundaries. It's within his rights to keep his private life to himself, but Reid especially would be soooo tempted to force down his walls.
I really like how you chose to show that, and I approve immensely.
Also, I like how you implied that Ben had a history with Morgan. It shows that he does have a history, and he can't keep it fully hidden, that his life can't stay just his, no matter how badly he wants it or how hard he tries to keep it as just his.
Keep up the good work!<3

- Tori

Pretty nice.
Keep up the good work.

i'm rarely on mibba anymore, and this is the only story i'm bothering in keeping up with. it's really lovely and i can't wait for the next chapter.

I love this story! I am a huge ass fan on criminal minds, I watch it every day x3 ;xxx
Cuz we have them recorded so I keep watching them even if they aren't on.
But yeah
This story? Is fucking fantastic.
I can't wait for chapter three!
Normally I don't follow stories from chapter one
I like to read beginning till end, or at least like they'd have 15 chapters or so...
But this?
I shall read this like crazy...<3
I like the pairing of Reid and Morgan... I was actually thinking about doing this pairing in a short story, because they just seem so cute, but since you're doing it, I shan't ;x
I like this story and can't wait to read more{:

okay, i officially hate you for being so creative! :)
seriously, this story is amazing and definitely unique!

Woooooooooooooooo for yummy writing.

Oh wow this is really eye catching, it's just so unique and I haven't seen anything like it.
Do continue, please (:

I never watch Criminal Minds so I'm not familiar with the character.

The intro just struck me. It's just so cruel! How can someone kill children. It's just inhumane. I just... I'm speechless. I like this story. Even though it's just first chapter but it got me hooked. I always love a good investigation story. So, keep up the good work. ^_^

I don't know alot about Criminal Minds, but it seems as though you know the characters very weel. Usually when someone writes fan-fictions and doesn't connect with the characters, it gets disjointed. But this flowed really well, and I'm eager to see what happens next :)