City Traffic Puzzle - Comments

can you pretty please update this?

First off, your summary is so intriguing. A good hook! And I love the layout - simple and easy to read.

Secondly, the first chapter (explosion) was a nice continuation of the summary. We have no idea why Alex is leaving, just that he is, and that is riveting. Another great way to hook the reader, as it seems you do throughout the entire story. You do a great job of keeping your readers interested and wanting (needing!) more.

And your writing is the complete opposite of atrocious, unlike so many other stories. And I love a good writer who can write from the male's standpoint realistically. I love that I can be in Alex's head a bit as you reveal some of his thoughts.

Keep it going, please!!

Wow. I really love your writing style. It makes me jealous >:3 But this story is amazing & I cannot wait to read more. You do a really fantastic job of description, and evaluating into the situation. Well done :)

PS. I just fucking love All Time Low.

Okay. So at first I was really pissed at you when I thought Alex was really dead but holy cats, i LOVE this plot line. It's beyond different from any ATL story - well, actually, any story - that I've ever read, and I'm desperate to read more.

I always like a well written fan fiction. This one is unique. The beginning produces a lot of questions and that’s essential to a story The detailing and emotions are good, you have a great story going. Great job, keep it up! I look forward to reading more.

Okay. Can I just say, I was automatically hooked just by the summary page. I am in love with All Time Low; especially Alex Gaskarth. The summary is exactly what I've always wanted to do my entire life. Heroes was the first song I heard from the Dirty Work album and it's my absolute favorite and just ... UGH. It's already perfect and I haven't even started to read it yet. I'LL COMMENT AGAIN AFTER I FINISH IT but lord love a duck I love you and this already.

I really like your storyline so far, it's just so different from any other All Time Low fic I've seen before. You are also really good at getting you characters' emotions across without it being too much. All in all, a really interesting story. Keep going! :)

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The background in an immediate plus for me. It just looks badass. :) I love how it's written and you can really see how it happens in your head, which is something a lot of writers find hard to harness, but you pull it off. Great job. :)

I agree, this story is very unusual, but it's so very sweet and fluffy and I just want to cry because I'm so overemotional and kvnruejghiokg. Anyway, the plot is really interesting and even though I don't really like All Time Low, I will keep reading this because I don't feel like it's ATL, I feel like it's an original fiction. I love the way you've developed all the characters and this story is recommended and subscribed by yours truly. Keep it up, it's really good!

I must admit that I find this specific genre of story extremely difficult to write, but you have managed to pull it off very well so far. You portray your character's feelings nicely, as well as very descriptively. I love how you express Alex's conflicting emotions, and walk us through his decision makings.

I really like this story idea. It's an unusual one, and I think it works well. You make very intense situations that are effective in making us care about the characters, which is a hard thing to do, so well done.

This is a pretty unusual plot, I've not read something like this before. I like your style of writing and they way you describe everything so we get a clear picture of what's going on in our head.
No critiscisms, keep going with this. It's good =]

Wow, this story is intense, it's well written, and it doesn't read like a band fic. I love where it's going. Usually I'm not a fan of short chapters, but here it makes perfect sense. Each day just feels like a passing minute while Alex is trying to complete his mission. Keep writing, this story is going to end up brilliant.

D': Poor jack, update soon please <3

I'm so glad you updated this. I didn't realized bow much I missed it until I got the notification that it was updated. It's so sweet that Jack is the only one one left with any hope that Alex is still alive. I hope he has something to do with Alex getting out of the big ole mess he's in right now.

Update soon, please!

Im excited to see where this will go

aw hey, thanks for saying you love the story :')

Jackkkkkkkkk JACK BABY HE'S ALIVE
YOU'RE RIGHT OKAY
I love this story so much ugh

poor Jack :/

Thank you to everyone that's commented!