June 25th, 2011 at 05:06pm
Ohhhh I just read it and I totally love it. It's very greeeeat for your first story.
Love ya
You got yourself a new reader/ suscriber
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June 25th, 2011 at 05:36am
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ooh, very good chapter, I'm looking forward for more of this story :)
it's a really interesting idea =DJune 24th, 2011 at 07:11am -
HEY HEY HEY!!!!!!
Oh my I'm loving this :) Thanks for supporting me through my story, I'll try to do the same <3
So excited for you =D
More, pls ^^June 23rd, 2011 at 08:12pm -
I like the timings which add pace - it helps to convey the impatience of the character. Though it may make it a little clearer to use paragraphs for the dialogue. But the revealing of information is done well - enough to say what is going on, but a little withdrawn still to maintain interest. I likes :)June 23rd, 2011 at 07:48pm
I like Alice, she seems nice...
Good job, love ya!