The Astor Hotel - Comments

Just wondering, but is this story based upon 1408?

EXCELLENT! An update, an an awesome one, at that. This was amazing! I feel so bad for Brian though, getting divorced and losing his daughter because of his career. But he's finally at the hotel! I'm excited. I can't wait, I know I've told you that a dozen times already but I honestly can not wait <3

Huh I'm kinda freaked out a bit now.
I fear for Brian.

It's hotel time! I can not wait. This chapter was brilliant. Matt is hilarious. Brian is perfect, as always. I can't wait for more <3

This is awesome I can't wait to read more.

So close to the hotel! can't wait to see what happens there. I've got so much playing about in my head about what could happen to him so i'm excited to see what's really gonna happen... waiting for the next chapter :D

this is delicious. i want to read more!

Great moment when the cat jumped out at Brian, LOL. I’m starting to get antsy and anxious for what’s coming. The only time that’s happened to me is when I’m reading Stephen King books. :) Can’t wait for more.

Oh my God in HEAVEN! IT'S BRIAN!

Okay. Sorry. Freak-out finished. Now on to the chapter, which is amazing. So realistic. I literally giggled when the cat jumped out at him hahaha. I can't wait to hear Matt's idea for Brian's next book. PLEASE UPDATE SOON! <3

I FUCKIN LOVE THIS! thank you so much for letting me know about it! i'm only through the first chapter but will be reading the others ASAP! :D YOU'RE AWESOME!

i fucking love this story

i fucking love this story

Wow!! Loved the update. :)
I like how Brian’s not in it yet, can’t wait till he makes his appearance, but still, I like how you’re giving the hotel even more background and history. Or at least that’s what I feel like you’re doing. :) can’t wait to see what you have in store for the next chapter.

Oh and Happy Birthday :)

Oh...holy...wow. This chapter was amazing. I was on the edge of my seat, quite literally. I was actually nervous for them. I'm seriously speechless right now, and all I can say is that this is definitely my new favorite story. I know I already told you not to wear yourself thin but please, please, please update soon!

AND HAPPY BIRTHDAY!

Loved the new update. You're a really good writer. Can't wait for the next update! :)

Oh, and Happy Birthday!

I think you've written a very good summary, I like that - again - you've taken him out of musical element, and thrust him into another world. I think it's an interesting idea too, the fact he's an author and he's going to all these haunted places. :) You just set yourself up for some lovely ideas.

Chapter One
The wind rustled the leaves to and fro, as a middle-aged - I think you might need to get rid of as in that sentence, because it sort of feels like the two are meant to be connected, but it doesn't quite make sense as such. I think it matches perfectly with the following sentences, but not so much with the former.

Charles Astor, III - don't need the comma

or become victims of - or had become; or became

that had ever made it him feel - I think 'it' isn't meant to be there.

“You,” The word - full stop

I quite like how this is a paranormal horror story, I like the setting in this first chapter and how it definitely has that creepy, lonely, empty feel - which really compliments the ghosts and the past horrors occurring on the land prior to the building of the hotel. I also like how this first chapter gives a cause of death - one where readers know the truth - and how later chapters might hint at past atrocities, or discoveries. I also like how this feels like it's a piece of history, it feels very real, and it just sounds rather promising - lots of stories to be told, lots of things to scare people with. :) You are onto something! :)

So, HAPPY BIRTHDAY. :)

Great first chapter to what I have a feeling will be a great story. I cannot wait to see how this story turns out. I think I may have found a new favorite story. Can’t wait for the next chapter. :)

I'm definitely interested to see how this story turns out. It's off to a great start. Can't wait for the next update! :)

New favorite story?

I THINK SO!

Woman, this is amazing! I am so, so, so glad there is finally a paranormal story on here! And to be written by you...it's going to be amazing. I can't wait! Please update soon! <3

This sounds like it’s gonna be a good story. I can’t wait to start reading. :)

Oh and thanks for letting me know about this story in the ‘Story Finders’.