Soulseeker - Comments

WOAH, I did not expect that. I thought Death was going to be a guy. I have no idea why, I feel like an idiot for just assuming, and thinking otherwise haha. But seriously I really love this, and I actually don't think it reminds me of Final Destination in any way because it's different. And I know everyone says it, but the way you play it out is actually different, and I am enjoying this oh so very much. I can't wait for you to update it.

I love the summary of the story first of all. It tells enough to pull you in and want to read more. And the layout is beautiful as well. Also the chapter names really intrique me as well.

The first chapter from Death's perspective (: I adore this. Reminds me slightly of Markus Zusak's The Book Theif. You always seem to know just what to write to make a reader want more, and you add questions with every sentence. The other half is collecting. After reading this line I got chills. I'm not quite sure what he collects, but maybe I'm just blonde(: but the things I imagine even if they aren't right are slightly horrifying. I really enjoy reading this, and the sentences flow together smoothly. So far I see nothing wrong. "I am Death, and I don’t like to be fucked with. " That is probably the best line I have ever read.

The beginning of the second chapter is well written, and that is how I would see a group of five boys acting. Underneath the teeming pile of manly B.O., leather, and jeans, Derek laughed. This line made me laugh. “You know she goes to the other high school in town?” This sentence didn't seem to run so smoothly to me. I'm sure the boys would know that the school was in town so maybe you could say, "You know she doesn't go to our high school right? She goes to the one across town." Or something along those lines. “So you’re fraternizing with the enemy, dumb shit! She’s off-limits.” Once again here's another line that made me laugh.

You're writing is amazing and I am tearing through this story. (:

"Had she Bedazzled the poor thing into oblivion?" <-- That was great!

This is really cool and I'd love to keep reading (I just finished the second one), but I've gotta head to class! When I get back, I'll read the last one and give you a constructive comment! XD! I just wanted to tell you that the line posted above was great.

I think it was rather really awesome portraying death as a female. Can't wait for the next one to see hoe Derek reacts

Summary & Layout: I really, really like the picture that you used! I think I could look at it for at least 30 minutes. It’s very interesting, making me want to read your story. I am immediately pulled into this story with the summary. I want to know how he finds out his gift, how he feels—I personally don’t think I could deal with it. But I think it’s the last line that really makes me want to read this story.

Chapter One: Gah, the last line made me snort/laugh…it scared my dogs. This is overall a very good first chapter. You can definitely tell that Death is pissed off! I also like it because it gives Death that…vulnerability. I love it when people write about Death and it having vulnerabilities.

Chapter Two: When I read the first chapter I didn’t any FD vibe. Sure they are similar in the whole dealing with Death thing. But besides that, I don’t they are alike. But onto the review part! I love the friend named McCoy, just for the simple fact that it reminds me of both Star Trek and X-Men. -_-‘ I like how he reacted when finding out, and afterwards, because honestly, who wouldn’t think it’s a coincidence?

Chapter Three: Uh-oh, why do I have feeling that Death and Derek are gonna be more than rivals? I like it. It’s kind of nice twist. I don’t think anybody would be expecting it! I really like the flow you have with this story. I also like how he goes out of way to help these people. I mean, I’m sure there are people who wouldn’t, who would just walk by and forget about the light, or ignore it. I’m really beginning to like Derek. I also really want to see how you carry everything out! Subbing!

OKAY SO I'VE BEEN DREAMING ABOUT THIS STORY. Reading it, that is. xD Just the name got my head in a whirl with excitement. I'm glad I finally got to block out time to get back to people and I'm even mor excited to read this (: The first thing that caught my eye is the layout and the summary. Cheating Death? (And you can totally kill me now...) It reminds me of Final Destination - and I really don't know why, but also The Book Thief - but I think that the director needs to read this and take notes on proper Death Cheating techniques. Fa srsly. <3

I love how you personify Death here. This is so mysterious and I got total goosebumps while reading the prologue. I can imagine Death sitting in a chair and talking to the audience about this subject of people cheating him, smoking a pipe like Sherlock Holmes with a British accent even when he's saying that he doesn't like to be fucked with. Yes, I'm stupid, but seriously speaking, woman, this needs to published. Like, now. This is AMAZING. Death is written so clearly and his attitude is perfect. I'm...in love.

I can only expect amazingness from you and this is pure amazingness. I'm subbing to this and I cannot wait to read the rest. U da boss <3

Okay I am commenting over chapter 3. Here we go. I like how you did break away from the FF theme and are having this guy going around saving people he knows, it makes him seem like a sort of superhero almost, but something tells me that this will become a curse. I am also curious as to when the main character will meet death and then the two will get into a fight or what not. You have developed this story rather well and I cannot wait for more chapters to be released. So kudos to you, keep writing it is very good.

This is truly excellent, not like any other story I've read. I especially loved the protrayal of death. So unexpected. I love it! Keep up the good work.

Love this please update soon

Can I tell you how glad I am to have stumbled upon your story?

I mean, finally! A story that I find interesting, finally! I like that it won't be dragged out too, ten chapters right? I'm sure I can stick around for the ending, yay. ^^

Although everyone seems to be lovin' Death's lines, I ... don't really? I mean, I guess I just don't like aggressive characters but hey, Death won't make me stop reading this. Because she isn't even supposed to be liked, right? xD

Ooookay, so I'm subscribed and just want to say I'm excited as to where this will end up going (:

The layout. One word. ANIME. <3 I love it. It's pretty and simple, but at the same time...not? I don't know how to put it, but I seriously do love it. :) Summary~! 'Tis awesome. Almost reminds me of Final Destination...only better. xD So much fucking better. Sorry, just had to say that.

The first chapter is very amazing. I like the bluntness and simplicity of the writing. It sounds like you’re in someone’s head. xD Just loving this. I didn’t find any mistakes, so woo! I like the last line. I am Death, and I don’t like to be fucked with.

I love the light idea. Really, I do. And sorry I said this was like FD, but I did say it was better. xD No seriously. This has depth…unlike FD. :P And I do like the way you write here. It still simplistic and pretty, and it totally draws the reader in. Wonderful. I also like Derek. He seems sweet. On I go!

“Nice to meet you Derek. I’m Death. And I’d like to know what the fuck gives you the right to mess with my shit.” I will love you forever and ever and ever just for that line right thur. I fucking love it. You are so amazing with dialogue…it’s like I can’t even. You did wonderful with this last chapter as well. I’m so glad Morgan didn’t die. That skinny bitch would have a hell storm come down on her ass face. And more Morgan! Woo! Go, Derek! I’m intrigued. And I like how you made Death a girl. You don’t see that too often, so thank you! :)

I really liked this story. It was well written and looks like you have a very well thought out plot. I didn’t see any mistakes. It was wonderful. I think you’d break many hearts if you didn’t continue this. You, my friend, have a way with words. You should definitely update soon. :)

This is amazing! I love every detail and the mystery within this. I love the tone and just everything overall. I am definetly subscribing to this! I want to see what death does and how exactly he is being cheated. I can't wait to read more! Amazing job!!

I already commented a few days ago ^.^ I'm subscribed also ^.^ I read the third chapter and I loved how you made death. Like all pretty with bright hair and blue eyes when death is dark and evil. It's just like funny, since for me its like a mask of happiness over something so evil, You get it?

I love the last sentence though. It was so funny! It's something a teenage girl would day ^.^ Like before, I love this story and your really talented <3

Nice chapter, describing the intensity of the light on Morgan and I did like Deaths line at the end of the chapter.
I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Just started reading.. Love it so far :]

LOL, THIS IS NOTHING LIKE FINAL DESTINATION. At all. Honestly I don't see how people are comparing it to Final Destination. Now that that's out of the way - I absolutely adored this. It was so creepy, eerie, and wonderful. If you delete it or whatever, I'll have to be really upset with you. This is absolutely genius. Plus the way you write is extraordinary. You're just really creative and brilliant. I'm honestly at a lose of words and I'd love to give you a far longer comment, but I'm awestruck. Fantastic ass job and I hope you continue, despite the FD bullshit. <3

I like this, the layout is readable and pretty nice.
And it's NOTHING like Final Destination I've seen the first three films and I can tell the difference between the films and this.
For one Derek isn't seeing people grusome deaths, he's just seeing who is next on Deaths list.
Plus Death isn't targeting these people.

Oh and I loved how you described Deaths point of view.

Right out of the box I can say this story is very interesting. However I have a complaint about Death. Death is well Death, he is supposed to be terrifying. And in this I felt it more like he got cheated out of a pay raise then actual victims. I would suggest making him sound older and make him seem more chilling. Just a thought.

For the next part I liked how you gave a personality to the group of friends, making them seem better as a group instead of just as individuals who happen to be with four other people.

Another thing I want to say even though this was said in the AN of chapter 2. I'm getting too much of a final destination vibe from this. I'm going to suggest you research about the movie and then go and try to make your plot line as dissimilar to it as possible. I understand your intentions were for it not to be like FD but that is what it is turning about to be.

I did like the story and I will definitely read more. Kudos to you for a great story and have a great day.

I'm jealous :p
I love the layout, the idea of the story, the first chapter..just ugh! I think this story is beautifully written and I cant wait to read more! I love how you dont go straight into the deaths of the people or whatever. There are a few stories that do that and it makes me angry for some reason. You started off really nicley and you didnt give the whole story away. I love it!

Once again, I loved it. :) The way you've set up how he recognizes the impending deaths is very interesting - and so unlike Final Destination, I think you'd be happy to hear. :P The ending line was probably my favourite, even though it was a cliffhanger. You set it up beautifully, and if possible I'm now even more intrigued as to what's coming up next.