Fighting for Freedom - Comments

Oh I love what she did so much, now if only she could have a chance with dawson.

I feel like jenny right now... I REALLY WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!!!!!!! :O

AAAAAHHHHHH. she runs away. pppplleaseeee tell me she runs away.

:O
Oh my... Oh my my my...........
I hope everything works out fine, this looks like a catastrophe is brewing...

PLEASE UPDATE I MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT

I just read the entire story and...I LOVE IT! It is amazing and very well-written. I only suggest to remind the readers that this is a story being told by a baby-sitter more often than you have been. Aside from that I find that you have made a reader-character connection which can be quite difficult to do. Please keep up the good work! =)

Oh no! D: I must know what happens next! I am on the edge of my seat here!

I love this story! I'm torn between wanting her to end up with Dawson and wanting her to develop romantic feelings for Landon because he is just so darn sweet and gracious!

Update soon!

I think this story is absolutely wonderful. The summary was the thing that made me want to read this. Please update soon! <3

Update soon please? :)

I just found this story today and i love it!
i can't wait for the next chapter.

I think the idea of this story is interesting. I've heard this plot line before, but I think it's interesting. There are, of course, the little things you add to make it yours.

Most girl’s loved fairytales, including me when I was a young girl. girl's should be girls.

“The life of a woman is never easy. We live in a man’s world, which means we must abide by their rules, whether we like them or not. That is our purpose in life,” she counseled me. I like this line because it really shows the setting of the story and how it's different than present times.

I like the flashbacks in chapter four. I've always liked learning about the background about characters. It makes them more real to me, and I think you did a good job with that.

Awh, I really liked chapter six also. The conversation between her and Landon is important, I bet. It makes sense, and I'm pretty sure what they said will come up again in the story...

Anyway, that's all you have posted. Overall, great job! It's a very interesting story and the way you've written it is lovely. I like the character's personalities and the situations so far. Keep it up!

First off, I love your banner and layout is gorgeous. It really matches the story, so great job with this.
The story, and your writing is brilliant, I didn't see any mistakes, at all. I'm not much of a fairy tale reader, but this was pretty interesting. I love the rebellion of the main character, and it's really good. I love the imagery. I love the feeling to the story, and everything about it is great. Good Job here.<3

Background: The background is really elegant. I think it fits the theme of the story ^_^
Banner: Again, really elegant. It looks like an actual princess =).
Summary: The summary really pulls me in and makes me want to read more =)
Chapter 1: The first part of chapter 1 is cute. I love how the little girl seems fiesty. I wanna see more of her in the future =).
The second part of chapter 1 is beautiful. I love your discriptions of everything =)
The third part of chapter 1 is beautiful as well =). I really wanna read more =)
Chapters 2-5: Chapter 2-5 was amazing. The characters seem really well thought out and prepareed. I love how in chapter 2 you have that little poem thing in there. I really want to read more and I am definately subscribing =)

I'm not really into fairytales but this one was interestig to read and I like how you have made the Princess able to choose a husband herself and not her dad choosing it for her

MOAR!
It's almost like Barbie movies c:
No offense though, if you don't like Barbie movies or Barbie in general.

This is long overdue but it's better late than never, right? Anyway, onto the actual comment itself. Your sentences are lovely. They aren't too short or too long nor do they end abruptly. They're just right and the way you word things make the story easy to read. Everything flows and is described nicely. I like how the amount of dialogues and descriptions are balanced. Too many dialogues tend to bore me so it's good that you have a moderate amount. As for the plot, I think it's great and interesting. It's amazing so far, keep it up!

I really like this, mostly because it breaks the fourth wall (sort of, you know, with Jenny and what not?). It has a really nice plot to it, which allows for so crazy twists. Continue to write, you'e got another subscriber(:

You deserve a cookie.
At first I read your stories for comment swaps, but well, this is awesome!
You really know how to write, and the flashbacks between the child and the babysitter, thats freaking clever.

The banner is beautiful - simple yet elegant, and goes with the layout. I rather like that. The summary is intriguing - I adore fairy tales, especial when they're well written.
I loved the first chapter, especially how it delved into the fairytale and turned that into its own story. You see that in movies, but I've never seen it in a story before. I adored the song in chapter two, and I love Dawson.
Jenny makes me laugh as I can just picture her saying that Lydia's wimpy.
I love this and cannot wait for more.

Even though I've seen a ton of stories with a plot line like this one - cliche princess wanting someone else - I still enjoyed this a bit. You have a few run on sentences though. Reading your stuff out loud really helps you weed those out.

I like your descriptive details, they really make the story believable. Everything seems all elegant and shiz. :D The beginning confused me a little bit though, is someone telling this story to a kid or is a princess telling her own story?