The Last Warrior - Comments

Wow that was really good, I have never read a book from that type of angle on Hercules. Please update soon because I really would like to continue reading this story:)

Work on some word choices. There were a few times you repeated youself .

And she felt her hand smash into a million pieces.
It felt as if every bone in her hand had smashed. Try to find a synonom for "smashed". It makes it flow nicer. :)

When the female bird lunges at her after taming the male, you change to 1st person.

Bahahaha! I love how the bird follows her around! xD I can see that! Love it!

Well, crap. That didn't work. with a word in between.

You switched between 1st and 3rd again...>.> But it was awesome! The fight scene between her the centaur(his name escapes me) was awesome!

Oh, and if you want to put italics you have to do this.

"word" Except no spaces, so it'll look like this. words. Hope that helps.

You switched between 1st and 3rd person once...but other than that, I loved it! :D I love centaurs! They are the shiz!!! :D

Loove it so far, cant wait for more.

Love the added fictional beings

There's a few errors, but I really like the idea of this story! Very original and your description is good! I think I'll supscribe. :)

I really enjoyed this first chapter, i cant wait for the next one!!!