The Consequences of Being a Bitch - Comments

GIO SEEMS LIKE AN ASS):
UGH.
anyways.
I LOVE THIS.
so much.
this shows the true form of all girls.

Wow. There's is nothing that I see you need to work on... It's great. It makes me laugh and it made me realize that I thought like that as a child, even if I didn't know it at the time. :)

I'm a bitch, not all the time though. Ha ha, I think my friends are thankful for that.

Summary: made me laugh. I love the names and the way it's been written. The banner is also quite lovely, whilst staying very simple. It's an intriguing summary that actually makes me want to read the story! Props for that - I usually click out if I dislike the summary (which is most of the time).
Chapter One: I laughed. Out loud. In a very crowded place. All I could see throughout the whole chapter was this girl saying all this to me in a very exasperated tone. I loved it. Plus, I can totally see where she's coming from. I was wondering though, with Anyway. Back to why I hate all girls if maybe you should do Anyway, back to why I hate all girls. No real reason - I guess it kind of reads differently (plus I felt like I had to find SOMETHING to nitpick). This is very good and I can't wait to see how the whole things unfolds!
Chapter two: But Carly had a bruised tailbone for two. That was such a good ending sentence! I love how everything is supposed to be so serious, but it's so funny that I nearly spit out my drink reading it. I'm loving Jubliee, and I cannot wait for the others to be introduced. Definitely going to be checking back on this.

I read both chapters. I like it. I don't like all the cursing, but I completely see it's part of the story. I like Jubilee's personality, she's the type of girl who will tell a person how it is regardless of feelings or not. I also like her sarcasm. Strongly reminds me of Olive from Easy A. Mostly this section in the story:

"Anyway. Back to why I hate all girls. Why do I think all girls are selfish, whiny little bitches? First of all, let me just clarify something for all you idiots out there. I don’t think that. It’s not just some opinion I have because girls don’t like me, wah wah, cry me a river, I hate you all, no one understands me, whatever."

She also reminds me a little of Regina George from Mean Girls with all the…b*tchiness. ;) I'm interested in seeing what caused all this…anger and where she'll be heading in the story. The grammar and punctuation looked good. I didn't see any spelling mistakes. It seems to flow smoothly. Good job. :)

YOU MUST UPDATE SOON :D

First of all, I have to say that I do not like your narrator. Before that seems upsetting, that doesn't mean I don't like the story. I do. I actually find it quite entertaining and very, very well written! I think it's a myth that your readers have to identify with/sympathize for/like the narrator. I think that a writer who can write from the point of view of someone who may not be liked by all and still make it a good story is a great writer. You are a great writer.

This line, I loved: Her bruise was pretty decent. It was that ugly yellow-green color, and at least the size of my eyeball.

I love simple descriptions. Some authors would go on and on about small details like this. And I love the use of the word decent. That first sentence really sets the tone for how the narrator talks; for some reason, it gives me a peek into who she is.

Over all, super well done.

lol. That second update was hilarious. Well done.
My favorite line:
'I was above that shit. I ate glitter.'
That is seriously like, the next step up from glue. How you hit that so spot on... like, I would've never thought to put that if I wrote it. XD
Hm... and well, Jubilee did give girls a chance at one point, I guess. But then they proved her right by being bitches, and so... she just hated them after that. :P
Great job with the update. So much relevance to it, I swear.
Can't wait for more! :D

Jubilee is hilarious. I really like her; she's a bitch and she knows it, instead of trying to act nice and sweet when she's not. Even as a kindergartener, she knew bitches. This is great! I love the tone you've developed for Jubilee; you've created her, let us into her thoughts a bit, and given her her own voice.

I also really like the layout. It fits in perfectly. Well.. I'm fucking stoked for this. Do try and update soon, it'll make my boring life that much better ;D

I just really hate Carly, hehehoho. c:
is it bad that I wanna drown her and her ugly rosy cheeks?
PLEASE UPDATE SOON, DEAR.

uh. not much to say except it is excellent and I am in love.

I love her name Jubilee. This made me look at myself twice. She maybe right, all girls are bitches XD.

I DON'T KNOW WHY I HAVE BEEN AVOIDING THIS STORY. LIKE, SERIOUSLY. I JUST NEVER CLICKED ON IT THE MANY TIMES I HAVE STALKED--ER, I MEAN, CASUALLY BROWSED THROUGH YOUR PROFILE. THIS IS AWESOME, JUST LIKE EVERYTHING ELSE IS.
YOU MUST THINK MY CAPS LOCK KEY IS BROKEN, BUT TIS NOT. I AM JUST EXCITED. :D
LOVE,
YOUR STALKER/FELLOW THE MAINE LOVER
RAVEENA
:)

I really like the banner of this, the picture is gorgeous! The summary drew me in and I really want to know more about the other two characters. I find Jubilee hysterical and I completely agree with her on girls. We really are all bitches, it's terrible. I can't wait to see where you take this. It's original and originality is something I've been craving lately! c;

Oh my god, finally some agrees with me about girls!

Can't wait until you post more because I will rape the comment button.

P.S.

I laughed my ass off.

Yesssssss! Yes! This shit right here... *applause*
Can't wait to see Jubilee in action.

excuse me while I laugh my ass off.
oh, she's hilarious, and just her name is quite interesting, it took me about a minute to get it right saying it aloud. anyways she's fucking hilarious, and she is right. it's the truth. all girls are bitches. I've witnessed it, and sometimes I'm a whiny ass motherfucker. haha, I just really liked how I could connect with the character and I liked how great I found the first chapter (:

Oh my god, I am laughing while I'm typing this. First off, I love the layout, it's simple and it's my favorite color =]. The first chapter was hilarious. All the while I'm reading this I'm thinking, If I met this girl me and her would have some serious bonding issues XDD. I lol'ed hard at this part especially.

Give a girl a choice between a shiny new boyfriend and a shiny new car, what will she choose? Both. Plus those new shoes and a fucking cheeseburger, why not? XDD. Keep writing =]

I love this story. I love it because she's so blunt and it's so true.
I love bitches lulz. Is that weird?
Anyway, I love your writing style and i love how you've done this story. I've been subscribed for a while and i'm WAITING for the next update. So put it up soon? Seriously.
The first chapter made me lol, btw. Which is quite the achievement. Anyway, please update.
(Btw, i commented on your comment swap journal, so yeah, kbaiiiii)

I love characters like this. Ones who cuss a lot and don't give a fuck what you think or how they're perceived. Characters like this just make me happy because they feel real to me. Of course, if they're over the top in their actual persona when they talk to real people, than it's unbelievable. Like, I think exactly like this girl, but never in a million years would I act this way towards someone. Great job so far. :)

This made me lol so hard I almost shit and pissed myself.

Oh my gosh, I am telling you, I already love this. I already love this, why?

Because it is so. Fucking. True.

And it is so. Fucking. Funny.

I'm subscribing once I am done with this comment.

Layout: readable, funny, easy on the eyes, a A++ in my book, my friend. ;D

Chapter: Pure. Beautifulness. You really put yourself in the characters shoes, and you say a lot of true things that people can deny. Girls are bitches. I'm a bitch.

I'm a complaining, pessimistic, I-Am-Right bitch.

Really, really, really write more. I love this so much.