Player of Hearts - Comments

awwwe.
i would've never thought victor to be such a sweetie.
if i was someone other than lee or tessa,
i'll probably think victor is nothing than a criminal.
you have such a great story hun!
♥

i'm hooked on the story can't wait for more :)

*plays guitar slowly*
Oh yeah! Okay, i liked the last 2 chapters, all flirty and stuff. More soons?
Sunny-Lee <3

Awesome story and i cant wait to read more of it.
Please update soon.
*subscribes*

Dude,that story RULES !
: D

KILLER!!!!
LOVED IT!!!

first kiss! amazing!
I love this story. =)

: D
They're so cute
Update soon ?

CUTENESS!!

WOOT WOOT!
i love it!
more more more.
XD

lol! It's okay if you guys overlook the first person/third person thing. I was just pointing it out. I notice things like this in PUBLISHED books, so don't feel like I'm singling you out, I'm just a grammar freak. A scary one. O_O
Anyways, I liked the picture in the 2nd last chapter, I just forgot to put that in my last comment.
So what? There's like 5 people in the back seat of that car now? lol.
Sunny-Lee <3

McLovin:

lovedInside:

PAGE CLAIM!
Okay, my favourite line: "Yeah," Brandon smiled as he held his hand up to Avalee, who stared at it like he was crazy, he grabbed her hand and slapped it to his. "High five, woo!"

It made me laugh! :)
Also, a bit of advice, watch when you're writing. You alternate between first persona nd third person. You say "He took MY hand" and "She slamed her door shut" which. The my and She are teh same person, so stick to one 'personality' if you will.
Nicely done though.
More soon right?
Sunny-Lee <3

Shit! We missed some?!

Yeah but I went back and fixed them thankfully! I thought I checked it all -whined- I overlooked.

lovedInside:

PAGE CLAIM!
Okay, my favourite line: "Yeah," Brandon smiled as he held his hand up to Avalee, who stared at it like he was crazy, he grabbed her hand and slapped it to his. "High five, woo!"

It made me laugh! :)
Also, a bit of advice, watch when you're writing. You alternate between first persona nd third person. You say "He took MY hand" and "She slamed her door shut" which. The my and She are teh same person, so stick to one 'personality' if you will.
Nicely done though.
More soon right?
Sunny-Lee <3

Shit! We missed some?!

Wow,i'm offically in love with this story
It's amazing
: )

lovedInside:

PAGE CLAIM!
Okay, my favourite line: "Yeah," Brandon smiled as he held his hand up to Avalee, who stared at it like he was crazy, he grabbed her hand and slapped it to his. "High five, woo!"

It made me laugh! :)
Also, a bit of advice, watch when you're writing. You alternate between first persona nd third person. You say "He took MY hand" and "She slamed her door shut" which. The my and She are teh same person, so stick to one 'personality' if you will.
Nicely done though.
More soon right?
Sunny-Lee <3

Crap! I thought I got it all out, me and my friend editted it and I guess we missed that, thanks for spotting it.

I want morrrrrrrreeee. lol..

PAGE CLAIM!
Okay, my favourite line: "Yeah," Brandon smiled as he held his hand up to Avalee, who stared at it like he was crazy, he grabbed her hand and slapped it to his. "High five, woo!"

It made me laugh! :)
Also, a bit of advice, watch when you're writing. You alternate between first persona nd third person. You say "He took MY hand" and "She slamed her door shut" which. The my and She are teh same person, so stick to one 'personality' if you will.
Nicely done though.
More soon right?
Sunny-Lee <3

LOVE IT

MORE

Nice updates. Notice the plural. My favourite part was probably when Victor siad he couldn't wait to go to class cause he got to sit beside Avalee. (ewe, my feet smell...) OH no, my favourite part was when he was like "Trust me, when you're with me, youll be demanding a lot of things," and Ava was liek "I shoud hope so." Made me laugh.
Nice job, more soon?
Sunny-Lee <3