Hurricane Heart - Comments

Oh Jesus, Arjan :'( For all my annoyance at Hurricane for deserting Arjan, I think I can forgive her because she seems really quite upset. Maybe a lot. It felt as if I was peeling a plaster off really slowly, you know, with the quick view changes and knowing what was going to happen to an extent. In a good way, of course.
Dear, dear, dear. My hope is that our ol' Master will have something positive to say.

Gosh, how can you do this? How can you write something so amazing that gets people to the edge of their seats? How?
You got me so exited and then BANG! it was over, leaving me demanding for more. So here I am, waiting and demanding :D
Oh, and what's going on with the music thingy? :)

OH HOLY CHRIST MOTHER JESUS GOD MY ASDFGHJKL WHAT IS THIS WHAT ARE YOU DOING TO MY EMOTIONS. THE FEELS. SO MANY FEELS. D': D': D':
First things first, they kissed. They kissed. KISSED. After so much time and so much denial and everything, Hurricane kind of admitted her feelings - I mean 'We weren’t supposed to fall in love.But when did anything ever happen like it was supposed to?'? Come on! - and they kissed and it was beautiful and a I fangirled.
But then Carl. And the most massive plot twist ever. And all the sadness and the no what this isn't supposed to be like this no no and... God. I don't even know what I'm feeling right now. Which is why this comment is somewhat jumbled and nonsensical and dumb.
I'm going to go cry in a corner now. Seriously, there are tears in my eyes.

'Was Arjan my enemy then? Because I was keeping him damn close tonight.'
That was my favourite line in the three or so chapters that I just caught up on. I can't pinpoint why exactly, but it gave me that ache near your heart when you read something really... good, for lack of a better word. Or see something really beautiful. The way you're steadily building up to some climax, or I suppose you are, is done brilliantly subtly and sometimes when I'm reading I feel that prickle on the back of my neck or realise my heart's beating too fast and it's wonderful.
At the same time, I can't help but be worried for the character's welfare.

I really don't want them to have to kill Arjan. And I want the Dreamers to win without war. And I want Hurricane to be okay and happy. But... I just love this tense/angsty/tough/mnaw part so much too! xD

I liked how Hurricane wondered who she is or who she has become and how she tries to insist herself she doesn't care about Arjan.
Feeling sorry for Arjan, again, but I think he understands why she had to do what she did.
I would be really interested in the music thingy. I always enjoy listening to some new music (for an example, this weekend I found three cool bands:) ) and you seem like someone, who has a good taste in music. Well actually almost everyone, who likes rock music has a good taste:D

I feel as if my comments are becoming less and less useful and a lot more commentary-like. Ah well. I thought this chapter was excellently paced and the dialogue was absolutely perfect as one thing I picked up on in the beginning of this story with Hurricane was that her dialogue was very, very occasionally somewhat stilted due to iffy wording. Although, that does just seem to be the way she is when she gets angry or upset, in which case carry on as you were.
Other than that, I'm hoping people aren't quite as sharp with Arjan this time since he's alreading in the prison. They'll probably find some excuse though. These Dreamers, so finicky and snappish sometimes - tch!

'I was the Hurricane; I was the storm.' My God. Good Jesus, that hits you right there, doesn't it? It's one of those lines that are just like a blow, that give you that twinge of wow just below your heart. Hurricane, let me love you.
Don't even get me started on Felix :'( However, I feel as if this chapter managed to be very eventful, for lack of a better word, whilst also having the emotional aspect which I previously mentioned. Very well done!

I felt a bit like Arjan in this chapter - we were so damn close to seeing the fully human side of Hurricane! But now I am stuck trying to interpret his dream in as many ways as possible and consider the likelihoods of any them being the right answer for what will happen. I hope there's nothing dangerous away from the road, because then maybe Hurricane will never find out what the dream means and neither will we!
Also, thank you for updating so quickly and regularly. It's really rather nice of you.

The suspense is killing me, but it seems I don't have to wait for too long, because posting 3 chapters in 3 days shows you update more often.
Oh, I got that subscription letter working: (or so it seems) I just unsubscribed and resubscribed ;)

Scumbag Mibba hasn't sent me any letters for a long time so you can imagine my surprise when I came here to check if anything had happened to you and I saw that there were so many new chapters. Reading all of them meant that I don't have time to study but I regret nothing, even though I have two quizzes tomorrow:D
I like the way Hurricane has been opening up to Arjan. I like getting to know her more. I like that they're growing attached to each other. I like how you mention and bring in the characters form Chasing Imagination. I like the excitement. I'm starting to love the name "Arjan" and I can't figure out why they want him so much. To sum it up: I love the whole story :)

Bloody hell, why must your writing do this to me? My stomach is all knotted with trying to figure out why Arjan is the Most Wanted guy and surprise that he used a stun gun and pride that Hurricane isn't fighting and gushy happiness that Felix was happy and then oh my God no no no no when he may have been shot. I really hope he's okay.
Also, I know I've said this before, but I can honestly say this story is the most imaginative and complex story I have ever come across on Mibba, and it's written pretty damn well! Brilliantly, in fact. This is the kind of thing I get excited over in bookshops. Anyway, I'm gonna go curl up in a corner now and try to untie my intestines.

Christ, poor Hurricane! All Dreamers have it bad, I guess, but her story seems particulary sad as she was young and brave and bitter. My eyes are slightly wet, actually.
At least maybe this is a sign she'll be letting Arjan 'in' a little more now, yes?

Other comment lost. Alas, alas. Still, onward!
I think in these two updates there was first so much information and new things to think about that I am slightly buzzing and then also Tobias is defintiely portrayed in a better, or perhaps more sympathy-inducing, light. As for Hurricane's apology... well, I wonder what will happen next.
On a somewhat unrelated note, your vocabulary and sentence structure is wonderful!

For a second there, I seriously thought Hurricane had been caught. My God, don't scare me like that again! Phew.

Well, let me say that saying those last few chapters were awesome, would be an understatement:D
Keep up the good work :)

I too was planning to write a comment before I saw your note and by the way it's not even because you wrote about Estonia (which is awesome) :D
I got to read two chapters in a row, because I've been too busy to visit Mibba. I liked those two chapters, beside the obvious reasons, because I felt like the story is going somewhere (like the new stuff about Hurricane, she's so mysterious:D ). The previous chapters felt like fillers to me (though that doesn't mean that I didn't like them :) ). Or maybe I don't remember correctly- it's been some time since I last read the story besides I'm a quick reader and a poor rememberer :D
Anyways, I loved it and I'm already waiting for a new chapter :)

I really liked in this chapter how when Hurricane was upset it wasn't at first blatantly obvious, although you could guess - I mean, people don't normally stare at blank computer screens, right? And then I thought how she didn't open up to Arjan or anything like that, which would have seemed out of character to me and would have ruined it a little.
'Dark golden beams shot through the leaves, the dust shimmering in their glows like fairy lights.' - I felt the need to quote this line the moment I read it as, man, that is some nice use of similes you've got going on there. Really good imagary, for me. In this chapter in particular, I also enjoyed learning more about Hurricane's past as she's still a bit of an enigma, even fourteen chapters in.
In general, I thought I should let you know (as I was in fact intending to write this story a comment before I saw your author's note) that your writing is just superb. It seems very professional and your vocabulary is phenominal. Likewise, your apparent knowledge of all the countries Hurricane and Arjan travel through is a delightfully refreshing change to some of the more botched attempts at research I've seen.
Aside from all these more minor things, I also wanted to say how much I adore the entire idea behind both this and Chasing Imagination. It's an incredibly unique and interesting storyline that has massive potential that it's already doing a wonderful job of fufilling. I look forward to seeing where you will take this from here!

And there I was, thinking that I shouldn't comment on every new update, don't wanna spoil you, do I:D Although I read my subscription email first, thank you, for letting me know personally :)
Arrghh , my mind is clean of good comments, it's distracted by my trip to Austria tomorrow :D But as always, I loved it :))

The update came sooner than I expected, which is as awesome as the story :D
I bet Hurricane is that "crazy Lithuanian bitch" who started to call the Marauders Soulless (or vice versa) :D