What You Know Is True - Comments

I really like this. Dallas is so real. His emotions and train of thought are so raw and open that it's hard to imagine that he isn't real. You really are a gifted writer.

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First thing I noticed was that your first two chapter title include “chapter (number here)” but the rest don’t. This may have been a typo? The summary was very interesting, leaving enough up to question so that the reader would be compelled to keep going. I like how you managed to tell us a little bit about Dallas’s character without simply saying “Dallas was a boy of such-and-such and age and he was personality-trait-here and second-personality-trait-here.” You actually seemed to show your reader who Dallas was before the story even begins!
Your layout is also very nice and neat, however the chapter title gets hidden because both the font color and the banner which is its backdrop are very dark. Possibly, try making one of them a shade that contrasts better so we can see everything.
In the first chapter I liked how you immediately jumped into the story without any tedious introductions and the inner-monologue style is great. Its quick pace allows the story to flow very well. Just from first starting your story, it was clear to me that you were a very skilled writer.
I do, however, agree with Liilly about the title.
Though this is not the style of story I am interested in and do not plan on continuing it, I'm impressed by your writing skills (: Best of luck!

I kinda agree with Liilly about the title and grammar and everything. One thing I noticed is that you tend to put in too much effort for the speech tags. I feel like you try to put something other than "said" every chance you get, which isn't necessary.
That being said, I love how you introduce the characters and manage to put in a little about their appearances without making it awkward. I envy that ability.

First of all, I think the title of the story is a little awkward. I'm not sure why, but it just threw me off.
You did an amazing job with your grammar and mechanics. The plot is also very interesting!
I think you did a really nice job!

Ooof! I fell in love.
First, the title of not only the story, but the chapters are fantastic. Second, I love the layout, like a lot. Third, the characters are brilliant!
Finally, I really enjoy your writing style and I'm definitely subscribing.
Update soon (:

Oh hey! You double posted, babes. :)

This story us so amazing I almost can't take it. Your grammar ... holy shit. Characters, fuck yeah. Author... and the Emmy award goes to...
Plain ol' orgasm overall.

This is an amazing story!
Dallas is amazing, and your grammar is amazing!
When chapter six came around, I was like OMG! Then, chapter seven came, and by the end of that, I was like what's going to happen next? I hope you post really soon! :)

this sounds so cool. I still don't exactly know what it's about yet because I read the first chapter. but, like the wolves said, the voice is just SO realistic and you can't help but pretty much fall in love with the main character. ugh
I'm reading more.

Your character has an absolutely amazing voice. He is so incredibly realistic, it seems like a totally real person. I can also see the beginning few paragraphs as narraton to the beginning of a movie. I love the bit about St. Jhudiel. Just amazing.

You're avery talented writer. I don't particularly enjoy the story layout, but that's just my taste and the story itself is so amazing that it doesn't really matter.

I seriously find you amazing, okay?

Oh Jesus.

Oh. This is amazing.
Update soon please?

(It seems I'm in luck with all the good original fiction I've found today, yessssssssssss)

Wow, I really really like this idea. I'm loving Dallas as a character already, he's great! (Such bad-assery)
I can't wait for this to be updated!