The Outcome - Comments

hi. I'm a comment swapper person c:
so, I read Twilight fanfics once in a while if I'm in the mood so I'm familiar with the characters and stuff :)
so, I really liked the describing you did in the first couple of chapters(that's all I read). I'm not a fan of Erick but whatever :P
the layout is simple (which is good) and I really like the banner thingy :)
You're writing is nice and I hope you keep up the good work!!!! :D

Hello, I'm here from comment swap.
First off, wow. I usually shy away from Twilight fics cause I'm not a big fan, but this is really good. Your writing is amazing, and definitely easy to follow. I like how you focused on the Jacob aspect of the story, because I've always been more drawn to his character. All in all, you're doing a really great job with this and I'm definitely subscribing! Keep it up and good luck with the rest.

-Jess xx

I was sent here from Comment Swap

I don't watch Twilight, so this was a bit of a hard thing to understand at first but I did get in to it really quickly. I think your a good writer, the Banner is nice but other then that your theme is kind of boring, although that doesn't actually matter. I really do like your writing and I think your summary is really good. Erick seems like a bastard, excuse my language!

Keep writing and good luck

I really cannot stand Erick. Urgh D:<

Fuck you Erick

It was a bit long for the next update, but hey, you finally updated and that's all that matters. Though I had to go back to remember the story, haha.
This is really good. That vision of hers was nicely put and explained! (:

This is amazing, it really is. I like this a lot!
Update soon! c;

Wow he almost took it from her but noooooo he had to chane his mind

Wow I'll be honest, I would've never read this story if it was recommended but i'm so happy this was recommended it. Its an amazing story so far. Great job. I can't wait to read more of this story. PLease update soon i'm dying for it right now lmao and ohhhh love the ending to the last chapter

First off, let me say great work on the summary. It makes me anxious to actually read the story. The story was great and I'm gonna recommend and subscribe and hope that you get more readers and such. Great job and I cannot wait to see what is to come. Also, this story came up in the comment swap and I'm not a fan of this type of stuff, but man this one was good, so great job! And I hope to see more come out of it soon :)

More more more =)

Aww there falling in love how cute

awesomeness! :D I love it it's adorable!! Please Update Soon! :D <3

I like this story please update soon! :D

Macie you really didn't have to look happy

Why you mad Erick why you mad?

I like how detailed you made the summary; it really gives the reader good insight on what's to come! As for the story itself, I think you did a wonderful job with your descriptions. There were some grammar and spelling mistakes that I noticed, but nothing too obvious. I'm just always on the lookout for those, to be honest, hahaha! But I enjoyed your story, and I like the whole relationship between Macie and Erick; how he wants to have her to himself but at the same time they almost can't be together? I like that aspect. Good job, and keep it up! :)

So far, so good. I've only read the first chapter and I'm really into it. It seems like a really good story. I like the way the action builds up until the last minute.
Although, I don't think you needed to put the summary in the first chapter. Kind of confused me.

The layout is simple, and relatively easy to read. Your summary was absolutely amazing. Though I feel the first chapter would be better if the summary wasn't included in the beginning. As for the writing in the chapters I enjoy the way you write. You give good descriptions, allowing for a great mental image to be painted. Great work.

Oh la la. I really like the summary, it is like a chapter in itself. Really great way to hook someone in to reading. It also shows you can write pretty damn well. Once I started to read on to the first chapter I was in awe. This is really good. Keep up the great work.