June 13th, 2012 at 09:43pm
Take a Breath - Comments
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Loved this update even though I hate that they lost. I can't wait for the next update. Update as soon as you can. Your updates always make my day.June 13th, 2012 at 07:12pm
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can't wait to read more! love love love this story :DJune 13th, 2012 at 03:55pm
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I can't wait to read more. I don't know how this story can get any better but now you have me even more excited about it. It seems like Zach is going to do whatever it takes to help Asher. Can't wait to read more. Update as soon as you can. You are an amazing writer so don't let anyone get you down.June 12th, 2012 at 04:42am
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Wait a second, the story gets BETTER? I don't know if there is any room for improvement, for this story is already perfect :) As always, I loved the chapter, and can't wait for more!!!!! I really want to know what Zach is going to do to help Asher!June 12th, 2012 at 01:25am
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I can't wait for the drama :) And honestly, your writing is amazing. I wish I could write like you!June 11th, 2012 at 10:11pm
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Those people don't matter. If they can't see a really well-written and unique story when they see one, then it's their loss, and it's definitely not something to worry about, seeing as you have so many who love your writing. But I know that it's annoying when people give you feedback that just pretty much sucks and makes no sense. Honestly, I am very jealous of your writing. being able to get great thoughts out in small, nice sentences is very difficult.
with that being said, awesome update. Glad that Zach finally talked to travis! And i really can't wait for the next one.June 10th, 2012 at 12:22am -
I loved the chapter! It was awesome (as usual!) I certainly can't wait until the next update to find out what Zach will do to try and help Asher!
P.S. I love your style of writing. It's unique and it offers a different perspective to the story. If people are criticizing it, then they don't know great writing when they see it!
Also, I want to wish you good luck and a quick recovery for your surgery :)June 9th, 2012 at 05:39am -
Ok, I have 2 things to say
A.) if they don't like your style of writing, they don't need to read it. It's your style of writing. Much can be explained through lengthy paragraphs and "short choppy sentences" it all depends on how you look at it.
B) I feel like such a bad reader. I didn't know about your surgery! I will be thinking of you!(: ~ <3 BJune 9th, 2012 at 03:50am -
I loved this chapter and I hope that Asher gets in touch with him soon. I love the way you show the person emotion in the point of view. I wish you well on your surgery and I hope you recover quickly. I can't wait to read more so please update as soon as you can.June 9th, 2012 at 03:46am
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Comment swap brought me here, I'm not a big fan of stories like this. I read the first two chapter's and honestly you need to work on paragraphs not just one line sentences. I like your characters though.June 8th, 2012 at 06:46am
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This was genious of you. I think you're an excelent writer and that you have a really good story in here. Also, I think you'r characters are really well defined and that's something I'm strugling with my stories. If you have any tips please let me know. Great chapter :DJune 8th, 2012 at 01:13am
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Okay so, I am not a huge fan of Hokey. But I do like this story. It has a solid plot, and great description of people. It’s very interesting, and unlike some stories I have read, this keeps my full attention and doesn’t trail off onto something else. Subscribing and recommending this story! Please continue with this story, cause as I said I am not a huge fan of hokey, but I do like this story though. It’s entertaining and interesting all at the same. Update soon, please?June 7th, 2012 at 09:55pm
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and i hope your surgery goes well and you heal quickly. :)June 7th, 2012 at 05:28am
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and i hope your surgery goes well and you heal quickly. :)June 7th, 2012 at 05:28am
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This is so good. I love this. He's really in love and you can tell in the awesome description! :DJune 7th, 2012 at 05:27am
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I'm not a fan of these types of stories, even thought I'm a huge NHL fan. Comment Swap brought me here and I can honestly say it gave me a good story! I have really enjoyed what I've read so far. You're fairly descriptive and I like your writing style. The layout kind of hurts my eyes after a while, but that could just be me. Keep up the good work, this is a great story!June 6th, 2012 at 08:29pm
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I loved this chapter. I can't wait to read more. Please update as soon as you can.June 6th, 2012 at 06:59pm
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I meant to say, "Which is the reason I'm here, commenting."
Oops.June 5th, 2012 at 07:12pm -
Truth be told, I’m not a huge fan of sport stories. I’m not exactly sure
But yeah, that’s how I’ve always seemed to be. However, I do have a big
Crush on Zach himself. Which is the reason I’m not here, commenting. xD
I can honestly say it’s getting extremely intense, causing me to be on the
Edge of my seat. I’m really stoked to see where you take us at the end.
I can’t wait to continue reading this!
I hope you update soon! :DJune 5th, 2012 at 07:11pm
Zach needs to sit Asher down and talk to her about it. That's the only way he could get his message in her head.