Asked to Compromise - Comments

Loved the updates :) I really can't wait to see what kind of mess she's about to get into.

Omg please update now!!! Ibreally really like this story!!!!

The intro in the summary about Priscilla was nice and told a lot about her character and I'm excited to see how well you're going to actually show that to us in writing.

First off, I think I saw that someone else started that your formatted isn't properly constructed and goes against dialogue rules per say. It's hard to read this and after someone says something with quotation marks, there is supposed to be a space between who is speaking, it just gets too difficult to read, especially while on a computer screen.

However, I will read first and second chapter and display my comment thoroughly. So, I personally like Priscilla. She's tough, in your face attitude and slightly annoying. I as a reader, hopefully would imagine that by the end of the story she matures a little bit. But I like her because she gives no fucks out to no body and her friends are hilarious, and like they say, you are how you surround yourself with. Priscilla's narration is all right, but I like her diction a lot better. Besides the formatting, like I've started before this was an okay first chapter.

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I like Priscilla, so I've said before, but I like her the most when she's talking, it's funny because she's very realistic and I'm pretty sure there are a lot of Priscilla's in high school, teen girls who are always upset about something or feel the world is just against them for some reason, and I like that because it's raw and human nature. I'm still a little clueless about her background, maybe in the next chapters or so it explains it more, but why is Priscilla like the way she is? She's like a spoiled brat, are her parents rich? Those are just some of the questions that came up while reading the first two chapters, but so far I like what I've read. There is room for improvement, as far as the formatting of this story and I hate when stories with so much potential get passed up because readers can't read the story. So, if that gets worked on, you'll be good to go.

I really love the new chapter! That was so cool the way Brian just told her about herself! Update soon!

Sweet update, awesome story so far: cannot wait to see where it progresses to. Checked out Walking The halls I'm enjoying that one too, make sure to update :)

Comment Swap delivered me here. I find to font a bit hard to read. I stopped reading after "...Try me." It was not an arbitrary decision to stop there. The formatting of the text lends for a natural stop at that point; for that matter; it seems as though there are only two paragraphs before my aforementioned stopping place. Formatting needs to be readdressed.

I agree with CassieScars there seems to be a lack of emotion; almost like your not entirely in tune with your protag. This left me wondering when something was going to happen. Usually, that is a good thing. Not so in this case. Spent some time with your characters and get to know them better; even though this is a fan fic you as the author has the responsibility to make your characters unique.

I'm from comment swap and I went straight to chapter nine because the middle is usually where the writing gets better and what not. What I noticed from that specific chapter was that there seemed to be a lack of emotion from what I read. Or maybe it was the lack of narration in between the dialogue. I just felt like the words she spoke lacked purpose or meaning. I liked the writing though. Didn't spot any mistakes and Sullivan seems sweet. I love Avenged Sevenfold though. xD

Haner seems to be the master of leaving people speechless, haha.
Hope you update soon, I can't get enough of this story!
xoxo

He left her speechless!!! Though he is right.

Woah there Haner. Calm yourself...even though you're right...anyways! Awesome update! Can't wait for more

Thanks for the update((:

Thank you so much for the new update!!!!!!! Please write more soon!!!!!

YAY UPDATE!

OMGGGGG AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE

glad you updated! awesome story c:

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i really like the opening of the first chapter. of course, i feel as if we can already begin to relate to this character as we have all been in those shoes of utter boredom and chaos.

priscilla...i really love that name, wow.

i'm not very big on the avenged sevenfold fandom, but that doesn't take my thoughts away from the content of the story itself. this is thoroughly well written and the only thing i must complain about is the way your paragraphs are bunched together.

of course, there is an indent when a new being begins to speak, but making the dialogue of a new speaker into a completely different paragraph gives us, the readers, a ease off of our strained eyes.

the layout is simple and not all flashy. aside that, your grammar is flawless as i've come to abide by. good luck!

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I don't really know much about Avenged Sevenfold (I hope that's right) but I really enjoyed this story. First off, your layout is simple but sweet and easy to read which is always a plus. I love Priscilla as a character and have already become quite attached to her despite only reading a couple of chapters. The plot seems cool and I like where it's going. Your grammar and tense is impeccable so I don't really have any faults. Well done I'll be recommending.

I would be pissed off if I were in her shoes. I'm loving the updates.

I am getting hooked on all of your stories! Please update soon!

Just found this story and it seems so cool! :D
update soon please *-*
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