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  • Vesper Lestrange

    Vesper Lestrange (100)

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    Comment swap has brought me here.

    So first things first. I have to admit One Direction is really not my scene at all! I know nothing about them!! So I only read the first chapter.
    So the first and only issue that I can really see is that if she was chatting with one of the boys at one A.M. and then some time has past. You mentioned that it was almost nine and her class began at eleven. More time should have past when she started to text Harry. So it should be later then two in the morning in California. Other then that grammar and punctuation are good.
    March 8th, 2014 at 09:33am
  • taylooooooooooor

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    Pleease continue this story, i reeally wanna read more
    August 31st, 2012 at 05:07am
  • Before 1975;

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    I'm sorry, but I can't read your story because of the layout. The text is overtop the picture, and its virtually impossible to me to read the words on my computer. Correct the layout, and I would be happy to give this story another shot. Wink
    June 7th, 2012 at 05:40am
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