A Better Man - Comments

  • Livelaughlove1221

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    COMMENT SWAP STOP BRINGING ME BACK HERE! Sorry!

    The layout is nice and simple, I like it that way. The story was very well written, full of detail and description. The summary pulled me in right away, curious about the rest of the story, which did not disappoint. The story flows very nicely and the chapters are good lengths. Overall, it's an awesome story! Keep up the great work!
    June 22nd, 2012 at 07:11pm
  • Livelaughlove1221

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    The layout is nice and simple, I like it that way. The story was very well written, full of detail and description. The summary pulled me in right away, curious about the rest of the story, which did not disappoint. The story flows very nicely and the chapters are good lengths. Overall, it's an awesome story! Keep up the great work!
    June 22nd, 2012 at 07:10pm
  • Livelaughlove1221

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    The layout is nice and simple, I like it that way. The story was very well written, full of detail and description. The summary pulled me in right away, curious about the rest of the story, which did not disappoint. The story flows very nicely and the chapters are good lengths. Overall, it's an awesome story! Keep up the great work!
    June 22nd, 2012 at 07:10pm
  • LouellaBelle

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    I really like this story, you have a habit of using unique ways to describe thing and words that people don't use very often that I enjoy greatly. One thing I will say is this story moves very slowly, a couple of times I found myself getting a little impatient waiting for something to happen. Otherwise it is an excellent story keep it up!
    June 22nd, 2012 at 06:23pm
  • i'm a happy camper.

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    you're a great writer and like how you in-depthly (is that a word?) describe everything and I just love it so much. you're doing a wonderful job and i love her name. AND it really does help that i'm one of the biggest harry potter fans in existence, so. yeah. keep up the awesome job.
    June 5th, 2012 at 06:59pm
  • BeautifullyCrazy

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    My friend and I still love this story! Is that stalker guy going to show up soon?
    June 5th, 2012 at 05:33am
  • BeautifullyCrazy

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    Dude, you're an amazing writer! Please keep updating!
    May 21st, 2012 at 09:44pm
  • kat starr

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    hey, i just read this story and i really like it..! :)
    May 5th, 2012 at 11:55am
  • GrimioreResurrected

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    I'm usually not one for commenting on many stories, but this story compelled me to praise you on this. However, it would be nice even for the reader to know a little about her past. I understand that Severus is guessing, but maybe a few hints here and there? Sometimes it gets a bit tedious having to continue guessing what is going on with her chapter after chapter. I don't mean any offense, only some suggestions. Again, the story is very good overall, keep it up!
    April 24th, 2012 at 09:10pm