Marvel Her Beauty - Comments

Alrighty so Comment Swap led me to this wonderful story, and just let me say I was a bit skeptical about this. I love the X-Men, but haven't found any good fan-fictions because, in my opinion, the authors of those stories try too hard. Your summary drew me in though and I gave it a chance and it turned out to be AMAZING! You have a great writing style and serious talent for writing. Your story has given me hope that there is great X-Men fan-fictions out there, thanks for entertaining me and keep up the great work (:

Hey there! :) So first off, I love what you've got going on with the layout and your picture and really just everything, it's really interesting.

I've never really got in to the x-men, while I've always been very into the Avengers and Spider-Man, I suppose. But it's always interesting to run into new things here and there.

I like the way you started it, it's sad, but it gets people very interested and I was really hooked, as soon as I finished the first chapter.

I'm quite amazed at the power of these 'people' I suppose. I mostly like the way you describe everything that is going on. Very well written.

I hope you continue to write and work on this, because I'm sure you could work off of it. Please keep it going. :)

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I've never really gotten too into x-men. I love the movies, but that's about as far as it goes. The story starts off well and I was hooked immediately. It is written well and I appreciate that. I like the main character. You describe everything very well! I felt like I was in the story! You did a great job!

comment swapper! I don't know much about x-men, so sorry if I get a bit confused! but I love this layout so much, it's so pretty :).

I like that this story starts off with a sad and scary feeling, it gets the reader very curious about what is happening, and why this thing is harming this girl. Gosh, she's running, I feel my heart beat a little faster, and the anticipation running, curious if she's going to actually make it or not. Great way to get somebody hooked!

How does Charles know her name haha? Oh, she's very important, I get it now. I can't believe one girl could save the entire human race, I'm curious as to how they're going to break that news to her.. pretty heavy stuff x).

I think it's an nice twist that she already knows who they are instead of her being totally clueless. Having a fangirl saving the world - this should be interesting haha.

Very good start, and you have a good writing style. You're really good with details, and it makes it feel like you're watching a movie.

Hello. I haven't seen any x-men films in AGES. I was going to watch them with my boyfriend before he moved, but we never got around to it. Anyways about your story, it very interesting. Your writing is fabulous and I love how make things flow. It's nice to come across a well written story. Keep it up!

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honestly not that big of a fan of x-men to read/write fic about it but you did a good job. the plot is clear and formulated. although, you might want to proofread your chapters before putting them up. i noticed a couple of grammatical errors but as a whole, the story's pretty good. keep it up :)

This is such a good story. I mean i'm not that big of fan of the x-men, but you explained it well, so i wasn't lost like i thought i would be. you are such a good writer, it's unbelievable! keep up the good work!

I found this via comment swap and i am not disappointed. I am not a hundred percent familiar with X-Men, its been a while But i still enjoyed this. I like the description and detail. Your word usage is pretty good. I look forward to reading more! :D <3 xx.

I got this off of comment swap. I looove Erik in this movie (mostly because of who plays him, ;) lol) and I love Raven, I always remember imagining he a my bestest friend lol. The story is awesome by the way, I lov it and I'm totatlly going to subscribe:)

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I've only seen x-men once in my life, and I've never been a huge fan of it, but I still think this is awesome! :) It was fun to read and well written. Awesome work :D

I found this via comment swapper and i am not disappointed. I am not a hundred percent familiar with X-Men, its been a while But i still enjoyed this. I like the description and detail. You also have really good word usage. You introduce the characters well enough that I remember them form the last time I watched X men. I hope you keep up the great work!

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Unfortunately, I'm not familiar with X-Men. But that doesn't mean I can't comment! :) my favorite thing about this is your imagery. You give very good descriptions that appeal to senses (eg; the heat in the 1st paragraph of the 1st chapter.) Keep up the good work! :)

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When I saw you were going to do something with X-Men I was excited to read it and see how it would go. I was a little confused with the first chapter, but I quickly got over it when you started introducing characters that I knew. I like the way you write. You are very descriptive in your chapters. I like how you took something like X-Men and then added your own idead to it. Kudos to you. Keep writing and good luck :)

So comment swap brought me here and because I haven’t seen the X-men films I didn’t quite know what to expect. However, i really like your writing; it’s very descriptive and you had me hooked on this fic after the first chapter. Great job! Can’t wait for more <3

At first, I kind of had no idea what was going on at first cause I dont really watch x-men. But the first chapter was so intense that I couldnt just stop at chapter one. Anyways the story is great and very descriptive. Cant wait to see what more you write to it!

I was a little apprehensive about reading this at first because I haven't seen any of the X-Men films or know anything of the plot, but I actually really like this story! You have a talent for descriptions, and I find myself really liking Ginger as a protagonist, which is good. Despite reading your author's note, I haven't noticed any spelling mistakes either so keep up the good work!

Oh wow, the beginning to this was extremely vivid. The detailing to it was great and the way you brought the story to life was perfected well! For a fan fic to x-men; I admit I have seen all the movies and it is a slightly different plot, but not a bad one at all. The idea is refreshing and unique. Honestly, keep up the great writing you do have an amazing talent for it!

Comment Swap brought me this story. At first, I was apprehensive about reading it because I didn't watch X-Men: First Class, but I rather enjoyed this story. It is a nice idea and the main character, Ginger, is more than one dimensional, which is good. And I like reading about her and her struggles to be more than she is.

But I did notice some things you could work on: awkward sentences, forgetting commas, switching homophones, not breaking sentences up into two or more, repeating yourself (but you don't do it often) and some spelling issues.

This is an example of an awkward part in a sentence, "The female finally realized how he was no threat..." (Part 1, where she first meets Charles Xavier). It should be something like, "The female finally realized he wasn't a threat..."

There are times you use there instead of their or they're and your instead of you're as well. And commas. You leave off commas when there should be one. This is part of the first sentence in Part 2 "...when a current of wind pushed the black clothe aside[,] allowing more wind to attack the room..."

Also edit down sentences. You create a lot of very long sentences: "She groaned at the awakening, her dreams of a beautiful world becoming unrealistic as she stared at the cloudless sky, with an intake of breath she pushed her sore, dirty body off the stone ground." Like that one.

It can be separated into two sentences: "She groaned at the awakening, her dreams of a beautiful world becoming unrealistic as she stared at the cloudless sky[.] With an intake of breath[,] she pushed her sore, dirty body of[f] the stone ground."

And watch out for when you repeat yourself in the same sentence, like "...that Shaw had already won and that Shaw had already won and there was nothing to stop him." in Part 2 when Eric and Charles are arguing.

But, I really do like this story and I'm off to go subscribe now. =) On this site, I try to stay away from fan fiction and I don't know why, but this story is starting to change my mind. And I do apologize for writing such a long comment. I like examples.

Okay so comment swap brought me here:) me and my best friend Laura recently watched all the movies so when this came up I was very pleased. You are an amazing writer! One of the best I've seen!:) please don't ever atop writing:)<3

So, I'm not gonna lie, I've never really been a fan of the X-men, (comment swap brought me here) but your story is absolutely amazing! It makes me want to get my dad's X-men movies and watch them all, so I have more of an idea what's exactly happening. But, keep it up!
-Taelor Nicole