She'd Be a Hurricane - Comments

This seems like a really good story, and I can't wait to finish reading it. The first chapter is a bit confusing, though. I didn't know people had in-house therapists, or that therapists could make decisions for people. It seemed like the move was a bit forced. I think a bit more details for the beginning would have been nice - it feels like I'm asking more questions than are being answered, and everything feels a little rushed.

There's one question I have - is her name Audrey or Aubrey? One is masculine and one is feminine haha

As for the actual content and how it appears to the eyes - your title image and summary images have broken links. The writing is a little hard to read because of the shadow.

Ahh, Im sad to see it end, but I'm very happy with the ending! I would be completely fine with you redoing this, I just want more of the cuteness!

Aww I don't want it to end!!!

I'm sad to see such a wonderful story end, but I cannot wait for the epilogue and hopefully a happily ever after, too! Thank you so much for writing this!
Love Katherine-Lynn <3

@ nyelabee1
Thank you! c:

Happy Happy Birthday!! Great update!

PLEASE UPDATE!!

Wonderful story so far

Layout: it beautiful and well put together, it makes the reader want to know about the story.

Grammar: 10/10 I didn't notice any mistakes In there, which is pretty impressive to say the least.

Plot: the plot itself is magical. I love how well thought out it appears to be. I love at the start the reader finds themselves asking questions, as in my personal opinion it's those questions that will encourage the reader to read.

Over all wonderful story.

I've been waiting for this story to be updated! :D

I love this story!!!

@ Isadora Pierce
And I totally appreciate it, it was just a little blunt and I don't know. I guess I'm over sensitive about negativity. Forget I replied. Thank you for your comment.

I was nice about it, I'm sorry if it came off as rude, it was just constructive criticism.

@ Isadora Pierce
damn, you could've been nice about it

I read the first chapter about three times and I'm pretty confused as to exactly what's going on in this story, who this girl is telling the story, and what's wrong with her. I'm sure if I was to read ahead all of these questions would be answered sooner or later but the thing that keeps your readers coming back in a story is not having bundles of questions when they first begin reading.

I also think that your character is the teeniest bit too wrapped up in herself and she seems very sarcastic BUT, that could just be the way you see her and how you want her to be portrayed, I have no idea. Just my opinion.

Your dialogue needs to be separated from your paragraphs, as well.

Your grammar and description shock me. As a fellow author, I myself tend to include a vast amount of description and am particularly picky with grammar. I figure your story to be well written, and thought out. I congratulate. You on your job well down

Aww Jared's so sweet! :)

I'm so lost.So Jared didn't attack her?

Yay! Your back :D So that wasn't Jared i knew i was right

That wasn't Jared!Why would Jared call his own kind a mutt?!

Comment swap brought me here.
And I am so glade it did! First, I would love to just say that your layout was wonderful. I love stories that have layouts that just make me want to read more of the story. And I saw little, (if any) spelling or grammar mistakes. Which, if a story has awful grammar and spelling...they I wont me reading. But this was a really good story so far. You had great description, which is something I look for in a story. Keep it up =3

Err that was post to be a 'gratzy' not grate lol