She'd Be a Hurricane - Comments

Love Love loved the updates! Def cant wait for more. Grate to the new addition to the family aswell.

lol they are so cute together it just adorable. i think it way cute that jared was getting jelous over zac lol.

wow kim is a biatch damn, lol. its getting better and better i love it so update soon please.

Your descriptions are pretty good, and you have good grammar (always, and I mean always a great thing!). Sometimes I get a bit caught up in the story and I tilt my head to the side while reading because some of the things you write down are relatable to my friends, on a slightly scary level. I love the tid bits of humor in your story, it's always one of my favorite things to read. =P

I like the story. I cant wait for more updates!

i love this story and i think that your awesome by the way. oh and i like the layout how it is right now and don't think you should change it.

good chapter! but i don't think you should change the layout :)

I love this! At first I was confused the i got it. I like the spin off idea.(:

I honestly, just from reading the summary section, didn't really understand what this story was supposed to be about. I thought it was just going to be a story about a couple's relationship, however the diary entry did give a small glimpse of Aubrey's personality, so that was really great :) Off to finish reading! haha

I was impressed as soon as the page loaded, the layout is fantastic! The colors make the story look fabulous and I hadn't even started reading yet! :O
Even now I haven't quite finished reading it yet but it's seriously great.
Your writing style is very appealing and it's all just nice. :D

Well, you've now reached your goal of twenty and I'm sure you'll get more(:
You're a great writer and you deserve every comment and subscribe you get.
Your writing just keeps us hanging on. Great work. ad Update again soon?

i like this story, leah rules! update soon? XD

So if I post three times in a row, will that make me the 20th commenter? Cuz I will. I really like your story. Twilight stories are my guilty pleasure, and I'm glad I stumbled across yours. It's well written, I like the main character, and I love that she didn't just jump into a relationship right away with Jared. It keeps the suspense up. Good job. Update soon please!

I WANT YOU TO UPDATE SOOON.
It's so goood.

.....I sort of skipped the summary by the way, I had no idea this was a Twilight fanfiction.

.....You still get my subscription. <3

Your tone and style is really decent, but I am concerned with the fact there was sex in the first chapter. You managed to be really classy about it, (or as classy as you can be about rape) though, so it managed to work out just fine.

In fact your overall tone seemed to hint it happens on a regular basis. In a "here we go" again fashion, rather than a "I'm such an innocent victim- pity me" fashion like most people insert that sort of thing in their stories for.

Overall, it's very refreshing.

I love the description around the dialogue- but I wish you'd add to it. I feel like there's too much dialogue in comparison to description. Dialogue is always fun to write, but a little more description to even it out would be nice.

The last line of the first chapter, though, I think is what hooked me the most.

It's a very simple sentence, not subtle at all- but very plainly spoken. It's also a very serious thing.

This. Is a really good story. And I haven't even got by chapter one.

<3 Please take my compliment in all sincerity, I promise I'm not usually the sort that jumps around stories saying "OMG so good!"

MORE MORE MORE MORE!!!!!!!

Firstly, I would like to say I absolutely love the layout, what a beautiful worn flowered background; along with the deep red center, really nice! also your story; omg what a great describer you are, the first chapter was simply deivine, great sex scene :D

comment swap brought me here again so um im not quite sure what to say without repeating so um ill just repeat what i said, the layouts very pretty along with the red and really its gorgeous. your descriptiveness is amazing and its saad how she tried to khs. the characters are well developed and you can visulize everything. i love it c::

Comment swap!
I don't know who Jared Cameron or Aubrey Mills are so I'm going just on your writing. I thought your storyline was very interesting. The beginning grabs your attention. But there were a few mistakes. Also, it was a little confusing on who was talking in the beginning. You might want to fix that. Great work!