If You Only Knew - Comments

This romance booster was just what I needed right now! Thanks for the wonderful update! :D

Awwww!!! I loved it when he winked at her to make her blush even more! He knows the effect he has on her and he takes advantage of it! LOL He's so adorable! ^^

Am I the first one to read this one? Wow! That has never happened before!!!^^

Yaaaaay!!! It finally happened!!! And I must say I didn't expect it to happen like that, so even though I knew this moment would come you managed to suprise me!

AAAHH!! It finally happened! Poor Kaley, I despise Vanessa and her fans right now. Such idiots! But so glad Darren finally acted like a man and just went for it. Goosebumps just reading about it!
I'm very excited to see where it all goes from here!

Concerning the contest (love the idea, btw!), here's mine: "Finally someone put Vanessa in her place! Don't know her, but already liking @KalesOfFun. You go, girl! Daley >>> Danessa!" - @loreloveslife

Finally an amazing kiss!
Vanessa is a bitch! Nuff said!

Update soon :P

AGHHHHHH THE KISSS FINALLY HAPPENED AND IT WAS EVERYTHING I HOPED IT WOULD BE.

I really fucking hate Vanessa.

FINALLY!!!!!! ah this was such a great chapter, I think the whole scene at the end between darren and kaley was perfect, it plays to my hopeless romantic side. I would absolutely love to have joey richter be involved in this whole situation, can't wait for the next one!

OH MY GOD!!!

I'm Happy They Kissed, But I Totally Wanna Stab Vanessa (In A Completely Non-Violent Kinda Way) =D

I'm coming here off of comment swap--I'm generally not attracted to fanfiction, so please take everything I'm about to say with a generous helping of salt.

I've only looked at the first couple installments, but it seems that there's a lot of throwaway or insincere word use going on. Just in the first few paragraphs, there is a sizable chunk of description that doesn't add anything to the text, such as Leah's "medium brown hair" and the overuse of the word "large," which is itself a weak modifier. The use of parenthetical comments and rhetorical questions, in my opinion, also adds very little to the story and can be distracting from the material which does deserve the readers' attention. On that subject, you seem to describe in the most detail the things that aren't necessarily important, such as the monkeys, which, again, can be distracting. Elements like that (which are typical of fanfiction) are pretty pervasive of your work. Again, and I can't stress this enough, this is coming from someone who doesn't read fanfaction and isn't very interested in character- and plot-driven pieces in general, so please don't read too much into my commentary, particularly since there are so many below who disagree with me.

I hope you have a good time with this piece, and I'm sure your readers will love it, regardless of what I may think.

Please tell me that Kaley is going to bitch slap Vanessa into the next century?

Whyyyyy???? Whyyyy??? Why do you do this to me??? LOL I need the next chapter NOW!!! XD Loved this one!

wow. i didn't know one comment could mean so much, but i really do like this story and im looking forward to the next chapter!

I just pooed myself...you need to stop with these cliff hangers :3

Finally found time to catch up on the new chapters :). Lovely writing as usual! A few thoughts: Super song choice! Don't You is my favorite Darren Song! So happy that Daley is drifting close together. Operation get them together seems to be going smoothly so far, they're both so ready for the next step. Damn Ryan, for making Darren help out! Ugh, the Vanessa fans are annoying! And Vanessa showing up, yikes. I hope she does not cause them too much trouble.

Long story short: I really love this story and I'm excited for the next chapter!

PS: This chapter already brightened my day from the last Glee episode, even though I was more disappointed than sad (I did shed a few tears over Klaine, but not nearly as much as I expected).

omfg!!! I can't even.... my emotions!!! I was hooked form the first chapter!!!!!!!! :3

WHAAAAAAAT?! ahhhhh NOT OK!!!!

Seriously, I finished the 32 chapters in one day, I need more! And they need to get together immediately! And their first kiss, let's get this show on the road sister!

A wonderful story I think I've been addicted to it
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