A Word Like Love - Comments

All I can say is this was a good story It was not like other love story's I've read if you had to rate it I would give it a four I would also recommend it people who love true story's

All I can say is this was a good story It was not like other love story's I've read if you had to rate it I would give it a four I would also recommend it people who love true story's

All I can say is this was a good story It was not like other love story's I've read if you had to rate it I would give it a four

I was skeptical about reading this story, but you captivated my attention quite effectively. Normally, these are not my type of stories, but this was... unique to my heart in reading it. The character felt very relatable in some ways to myself, which I loved. I thought the ending was OK, nothing too much but the rest of the story was great, and I loved that your attention to detail was spot on. I am curious now as to the rest of your stories, with your writing being what it is, I’m very impressed. I noticed one person said to be less liberal with your descriptions, but I have to respectfully disagree. I think it paints the picture all the better with how much detail you provided in the overall story, and the stories were not overly long and wordy, which I thought was helpful in keeping peoples attention. One complains I mat have is the centering of the text, it’s not my cup of tea, I prefer traditional book-style writing like aligned to the left and indentions, but I don’t know how to do that if at all possible. Maybe you do, maybe others do and also, maybe people liked this style of layout. I don’t, personally, but it’s nothing too major.

Brought here by comment swap. The summary alone had me hooked, and I'm glad I read this all the way through. The overall tone to me was bittersweet, especially the true theme of finally coming home to the one person who never left your heart; it calls to mind other guys from years ago who I can never forget because of what they mean to me. This was beautifully written.

I think you do a great job with getting the reader immediately interested. Your first chapter leaves a lot of questions for the reader and it forces them to continue reading. I didn't really see any grammatical errors, so nice job on that. The concept is really interesting to me and like I said before, even if it wasn't interesting, the first chapter is so vague you really need to continue reading in order to feel satisfied. The only thing I would consider is being a little less liberal with your descriptions. I am in agreement with other commenters that you have a gift for imagery, but there was some points where I was getting a little lost in the metaphors. I would just switch it up from time to time in order to keep the reader from feeling bombarded by metaphors and similes. Overall, you have a really great start here! Good luck with your story! You've got wonderful descriptions throughout the story. I love your paragraph and chapter lengths. They're just about perfect. But, I would suggest proofreading a little. There are a few mistakes throughout the piece. Though the story is a little hard for me to follow (probably cause it's just not the genre I'm into), it's still sounds like it has great potential! Keep on writing! :)

This was written beautifully I noticed a few minor grammar errors, but if you're like many people on here you are using this website to get opinions on your rough draft. I really have to admit I am enjoying this more then I thought I would, I am glad comment swap brought me here. I'd give this a 9/10. I took one point off just because I was a tad bit confused while reading this, and I had to go back maybe twice to reread something. Very well written though!

In your prologue, it says "He was all of our's really." The 'ours' shouldn't have an apostrophe before the 's.'

I love the way you write. The places that you break your paragraphs at are great. They give your writing time to breathe.

Sorry to spam you with comments but I just re-read it carefully and I think it is really great that you're writing about your life. I also went through my stories on Mibba and found a book that I wrote called These Are The Letters You Will Never Read and all it is, is a book made up of letters I've written to different people telling them how I'm feeling at that moment. It's all truth and it's all come straight from that emotion filled moment. Great job, fantastic story so far! Well done!

It's really interesting, I'd like to read more.
It was just the her day I was thinking of doing a similar thing.

It's really interesting, I'd like to read more.

Oh and you should keep posting. I really love this story and i think its beautiful and well-written. And I like how it a true story which made it more beautiful. Again keep posting!

This is amazing work! I love how you use a lot of descriptive words. You made me picture the whole story. Nice work and keep it up.

I really love this! And I can totally relate to pushing someone away, even though you want them more than anything. Your grammar seems fine, as your spelling. I did get a bit confused in places, but I cant wait to read more :D <3

First off, I like the layout.(:

I haven;t read any true stories on Mibba before until this one, and this story makes me want to. You write from the heart, and I actually can relate to it. Your writing style is very good, and it just makes me want to keep reading and reading.(:

You go into detail, and use a lot of decriptive words and phrases, which makes it more fun and interesting to read, making it a very good read.

You're a very good writer, keep it up!(:

I really like this! :) I'm not usually one for true stories, but I like this one. Just keep an eye out for some spelling, and run it through spellcheck.

Way to go to get up the nerve to put this out there. Anyway, I quite like this! But yes, my biggest thing would be for you to read through and check for spelling and whatnot.

I actually really like reading true stories, and I came across this one on comment swap.

This is amazing! I'm really glad you had the courage to write this...I didn't. I stopped mine after a few chapters, so go you!!!!

The only thing I would say is you might want to proofread a little more carefully because I see some errors, but nobody can catch all those so don't sweat it. I'm also going to go completely hypocritical on you because I don't do this myself, but you're supposed to end your dialogue with a comma instead of a period if you follow it with something like 'he said' or 'I replied' etc.

Beautiful story and very, very good job! I love it!

I dont really read true stories on here, but i gotta say I got comment swapped here and I'm quite enjoying the first couple of chapters...
It must still mean a lot to you to be written in such a public domain so kudos for that, your writing is also very easy flowing, almost like a conversation so I like that ++++ your layout is really nice :)
Good luck with your writing
<3

Although not exactly the type of story I would usually feel compelled to, I like it. The character, although in the prologue seems a little like a Mary Sue, does show me wrong. And it always takes courage to write true stories like this, fiction is kind of easier. Kudos!

It's really meaningful how you're doing this. Just having this be real and everything is amazing!