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I don't really know anything about The Wanted, but if I did, I feel like this story would be absolutely amazing! The comment swap led me here, and I'm glad it did, because your writing is spectacular. I'm gonna subscribe, I definitely want to see where you go with this story! I can't wait to read more!

I have no idea who these people are, but the comment swap led me here and I do like the plot of the story and how nicely this story flows. It cracks me up from time to time and Hennessey is just a teddy bear it seems. I do feel bad for Nathan, but I feel like I need more of a background since I had no idea who these boys are and it would be nice to add things to the story like you are writing to readers who have no idea who these people are. It did hook me in though, great start to a wonder story

I honestly can't to see what more of this story holds. I don't know a whole lot about The Wanted but they guys seem to be like any typical band. I think its interesting about how much she is trying to avoid her past when the past is what makes you the person you are in the present.

I'm not at all familiar with The Wanted, though they seem cute from the picture you used. The first chapter went by kind of fast, and I felt like I needed more background on your character before the first paragraph was even giving, but it's still a good start to your story.

POOR NATHAN OMG MY HEART WEEPS FOR HIM!!!
See I like Gemma but I don't approve of her breaking his little heart like that. William is boring and dumb and old and Nath is adorable and funny and she needs to open her eyes and see that he is better for her!!

Sigh, but I can't wait for the next update and hopefully she stops being so blind soon!

awe Nathan :( poor baby. she needs to ditch the douche & get with the baby lol lovely chapter as always. update soon! xx

Aw this chapter was still amazing though my heart broke a little for Nathan. So anyways, I did like the chapter, and I could feel the hate that Nathan had for William by a lot. Can you post a picture of William in the next chapter?

Hennessy was so worried and I think she had every right to be because she gave up Gemma's location, I would have been mad to. I love how Gemma was able to forgive Hennessy and the guys so fast, but what I don't like is how she didn't notice Nathan had went missing.

I can't wait for chapter 6!

This is from comment swap :P...

I have to say never heard of this band. But I like Nate so far and the rest of them. Gemma is kinda awesome name very unique. I like where this is going so far but it was kinda sad when she turned him down for the older guy. How old are they anyway?

Story line is kinda a mystery so far. :). But I'm sure you know how's its going to go lol. Any way update soon I wanna know what's going to happen next.

Subscribed!!

So I'm a little in love with this story. I've already been liking The Wanted for a while but this story basically just took it a little bit further. This isn't story related but I've always grown quite fond of your layout - it all just goes together and the guys look absolutely adorable in the picture. c: Gemma and Hennessy are great characters and I love how you had them developed/created. Anyways, great story. Can't wait until the next update!

So it's almost sickening how adorable this story is. Truly. It's so light and fresh in a place where heavy/awkward plot lines roam so freely. I give you mad props for that. I absolutely love Gemma. She's pretty much to die for. Also, it's a wonderful touch to inclue images of her outfits from Polyvore, and she has some great taste. haha

I've never heard of The Wanted, but you have me hooked. I'll need to look up soon! If I totally love them you'll definitely hear about it. haha Also, I love how your paragraphs are using a central format. I know that's odd, but I don't have the courage to do it. I'm for sure going to subscribe to this one. Keep going!

This story is horribly cute. I also really really really love all of Gemma's outfits. I love how they always have cool and interesting guages with them. I love all of the clothes, jewelry, ad accessories too.

This story is horribly cute. I also really really really love all of Gemma's outfits. I love how they always have cool and interesting guages with them. I love all of the clothes and accessories too.

I'm quite impressed by this, though I must say I don't know about The Wanted a lot. However, they seem to be okay kids. :)

I like Gemma, she's kind of awesome. And it's sweet how she didn't get really mad at him for looking her up on Google! I would have flipped shit all over. LOL.

The layout is also beauteous. I have to say I'm not big on the pink flowers, but they made the whole thing just a bit warmer. Everything fits together nicely and I made sure to thank Comment Swap deeply, it's a good story even if I don't know the band. I hope you keep writing (and Polyvoring)!

--J

I really really love this, although I'm not very familiar with the fandom. I like your writing style and the layout is gorgeous. My only criticism is that, especially in the first two chapter's there's a lot of dialogue and not a lot of descriptive writing so it's a little hard to follow. But otherwise I love his! Please update soon! :)

So sorry I didn't get to comment you last night I got off in a rush so I really am sorry, but I am here now to comment on the fourth chapter.

In some ways I feel sorry for Nathan because he feels guilty and really want s to make it up to Gemma, but Gemma in a way is sort of difficult without her knowing it. So in a way Nathan is like a love sick puppy who just did something bad and needs to make it right, but can't because the owner has forgiven but the puppy doesn't understand. (okay that sounded better in my head.)

Then the older guy thing, I really hope Gemma understands in someway that age doesn't matter, well she probably will later on. Nathan should feel better because he has the younger aspect and is way cuter then any older guy that could walk into Gemma's life.

Hennessy I just love her... I like how she was there to talk to Nathan and say really it's not you, she's just always had a better way with older men, without giving to much out, because it's not her place to give out information about her cousin without even asking if it's okay.

Max, is the true meaning of good friend and best friend, by saying they will get Gemma and him out on a date weather it be one way or another, I just hope Max doesn't mess up when he gets what ever plan he is working on in his mind, because it could get really messy.

Over all great chapter BFSF! (Best Friend Sister Friend) :D Write more soon.

Okay, so firstly I'm here from comment swap and I am SO glad it gave me this one!
I LOVE The Wanted and I haven't been able to find any good fics about them until now! PLUS Nathan is my favorite so I literally did a happy dance when I clicked it and saw it was a TW fic.

Firstly, the layout is so neat and nice and pretty! I love it. (Also because pink is my favorite color and it's quite pink). Also, I adore the picture of them you chose as the banner. It's adorable.

Now, for the story, I love your writing! It's grammatically correct and the spelling is spot on which is a big thing I pay attention to. I like Gemma's character in the aspect that she'd trying to leave her past behind, but poor Nath! I personally would jump at the chance to have dinner with him but hey whatever~
I also love how Jay and Hennessey hit it off right. They seem to have really good chemistry. But ugh, my heart hurt for poor Nath. I am definitely subscribing and I can't wait to see where this goes! :)

my gosh. first off, the layout of this is freakin adorable! i love it! i miss seeing such cute layouts. second, the first thing i love about this story is the description. i hardly saw a single flaw in your writing. perfect grammar and no spelling mistakes. this is lovely! keep writing!

Oh and mine was fom comment swap

Oh and mine was fom comment swap

I really don't know the wanted but this fan fic is very interesting I enjoy reading it.its like I can't stop and that's what I want in fan fics I really hope u update soon because I will be waiting for this amazing story please update