The Ideas of When - Comments

How funny, I have a character in my story named Riley as well. It's such a good name, I've always loved it.

As a musician, I can connect with him as he's playing, which is something that is hard to do without physically playing. Though, I don't play the piano. Sax & Clarinet.

As far as writing style goes, very intriguing. The plot is original and even though the layout is super simple, it sets the gothic feel to it. I'm a sucker for dark romanticism so it's certainly appealing.

here from comment swap again (: wow well i am really glad that i got recommended this story because it is really good! I really enjoy the way you portray your character Aidan, he's really different and stands out and i LOVE the relationship you have between him and his mother, just the whole plot itself is amazing actually.not to mention that your layout is pretty nice too, easy and soft on the eyes is always a plus.your attention to detail and description really caught my attention as well so definitely a good job done on that, so i really honestly cant think of anything wrong with this story.the grammar and dialogue are good and the chapters are nice and even flowing so all in all i think you did a great job! i really cant wait to read more! :)

here from comment swap (: wow well i am really glad that i got recommended this story because it is really good! I really enjoy the way you portray your characters and the whole plot itself actually.not to mention that your layout is pretty nice too, easy and soft on the eyes is always a plus.your attention to detail and description really caught my attention as well so definitely a good job done on that, so i really honestly cant think of anything wrong with this story.the grammar and dialogue are good and the chapters are nice and even flowing so all in all i think you did a great job! i really cant wait to read more! :)

@ Jaii
Thank you so much for commenting! And I am defintely continuing this.

This was a very good read. I was immediately drawn to your protagonist and intrigued by the visions he has to cope with. I like that you incorporated his own interpretation of each vision. The writing was excellent and I can't wait for more~ I saw very few grammatical errors...those of which were simple mistakes that are easily overlooked from too much rereading xp. Overall I think your story show promise and I hope you continue with it ^^

@ XXXataktoulaXXX
Thank you so much for commenting AND subscribing! I hope to hear more from you again when I update this with chapter 4. I'm really glad you like this.

Dear author, first of all I was really happy when I realized comment swap brought me to a nicely written story like yours. What can I say, I like everything about it...from the character you created to the summary, the story's title and honestly everything. I believe this is the first story I read from you. I'll have to check more of your writing. No need to say but I already subscribed to this. :D ~Marian.

Dear author, first of all I was really happy when I realized comment swap brought me to a nicely written story like yours. What can I say, I like everything about it...from the character you created to the summary, the story's title and honestly everything. I believe this is the first story I read from you. I'll have to check more of your writing. No need to say but I already subscribed to this. :D ~Marian.

@ Lil'Biskette
Thank you so much for the comment. Publishing this honestly is what I want to do, but first I have to finish it. I think you'll be happy to know chapter 3 is almost ready to be posted. Again, thank you for the wonderful comment.

Hello! I am from comment swap

My, my, my, my what to say to your flawless work?! This I must say is astounding, most amazing incredible work. Your imagry, wonderful, I could feel everything, it was almost as if I were lucid dreaming. Your phrases and diction (I love the third person, for me it is hard to do) is most amazing. Will you be publishing this? Enetering this in a contest? If not, please do! Your characters are very solid, and the story line is very well written. The only thing I could say that I was dissapointed in, there are only two chapters, very saddening. The ending was beautiful, many of the stories I have read have not the greatest of endings but you seem to have this entire writing thing with you! Good luck on further pieces!

thank you so much comment swap.
This is amazing, i will definitely be subscribing and recommending this it's so good. It's written really, really well and you have a great story line going already. i really wanted to read on, please update it soon. i love the relationship you gave Aiden and his mother. i didn't see any grammar or spelling errors and i don't think i have a bad thing to say about it.

@ Marulla Quirk
Thank you so much for this comment! And that's exactly what I think about working on a nanowrimo afterwards. I had almost all of it written, so I know where I want to take it this time around. Thank you for the kind words, I'm glad you liked it enough to give me more than just the generic "I love it!"

I hope you like the next chapter just as much!

Ha, the story I'm working on is a failed nanowrimo. I think they're funner to rewrite since you have the groundwork and you're not on a time limit desperately cranking out words. That being said, boy can you construct a narrative! He has a great voice. The focus here was more back story than plot, and the fact that you could keep a reader so absorbed is commendable. You were able to fully realize your teenage character instead of taking the easy way out and making him whiny. This first chapter was writing ability alone at its finest, and I will definitely keep reading.

@ jacasaurusrex
Again, thank you

@ recluse-
Well you certainly got further than I did! I think I topped out at about the end of the chapter I posted. Lol. But you are truly welcome, you've got talent, lady!

@ jacasaurusrex
Thank YOU so much for this lovely comment. I got sort of close, and it was my first year. I ended up near like 36k I think. This really has made me smile. I would have never considered anything I wrote to be subtle, and the fact that you think I wrote the part of Aidan's struggles with his father's passing poetically, makes me smile more than you know. I can't even tell you how good that makes me feel.

I couldn't write it like that anyway. It's not smoething that's plain, that can just be said as if it's not a big deal.

Again, thank you for the wonderful comment. I'm glad you liked it!

Here from the Comment Swap! I have to say for starters that my fic is a NaNoWriMo leftover too! I always have such good intentions to get to that 50,000 mark and never even come close. Lol. But on to the story. I really, really like it. I think you've got a nice subtlety to your writing that a lot of writer's lack. You write about Aiden's struggles with his father's passing almost poetically. You could be one of those people who write like "Aiden's dad died, he was heartbroken, he was super depressed, he always visited the woods, life sucked" but you chose rather to show those things instead of stating them outright. Gorgeous bit of work!

@ LadyLemoncakes
I'm glad you like it! And thank you for the wonderful compliments

Layout credit goes to @silk tea.

Alright, so I guess I'm reading the revised version of the story? Well, may I say that I absolutely LOVE it! :)
I love your writing style. Its flows well and is very descriptive.
Plus, I love that the beginning isn't super slow, its interesting and intriguing.
And I really really like your last sentence. Ugh, beautiful! ^_^
I'm not the best reviewer but I just wanted to let you know how I feel about the story. x)
Ps. I also love the layout. So pretty! :)