Cosmic Love - Comments

Comment swap sent me here! :DDD I gotta say, you're a very descriptive writer, and I highly enjoyed every chapter. :D I think everything was very well written, and i'm glad I was sent to this story. :]

Write more yes!!

Peter is very intriguing and mysterious! I am quite interested in finding out more about him as well as more about the forest. Can't wait for the next update!

This Peter is character is very intriguing, and quite suave too, in his mysterious ways. I had a feeling that that strong smell she'd been smelling was a person, perhaps the person from her dreams... Strong and protective, she'd definitely need that going into the forest with all those werewolves...

This is getting interesting! I had a feeling that Peter was the one who she kept smelling. Can't wait for the next update!

I love this story!! It's soo good. PLZ update soon!!

i love this! Please write more.

Yeah new update!
I like how you have everything written, it makes me feel like I'm there. Keep it up! I want to know what happens with Ivy now!! :]

Hello! Comment swap brought me here. To begin with, I must say I really do love prologues, they can totally draw you into a story. However, I will stay I personally like prologues to be written like they are more a part of the story rather than a place to describe the setting and the characters and their relationships etc. I feel like this should be developed over the chapters of a story instead of stated in a paragraph at the beginning. It just makes it more interesting. I love the end of it that's great, but the beginning is a little rough.

The thing I found the craziest is the difference between the writing in the Prologue and the first chapter. The prologue was so simple and a little boring I might have turned away straight off, but the next chapter is written absolutely beatifully. I especially loved "My death is waiting for me in the trees." It was utterly chilling to read that.
Another thing that I found a little weird was the 'motherfuc-" part. I feel like with the setting and language that is used through most of the story that is just completely out of place and felt weird.

Sorry it got a little long there! I have a tendency to ramble... Over all, I think you write beautifully, but the prologue needs something a little bit catchier in it just to grab the reader's attention and rein them in. That's only my personal opinion though, and it is your story. I hope you continue, this sounds like it will be excellent!

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I love the new placement of Werewolves and the way you have mixed dream and reality. Your descriptions are brilliant and really draws the reader into your words.

Great job x

Just started reading, I love it! Update soon please :)

Good job on the character page. Update soon, I can't wait!

So I got this through comment swap, and I must say I absolutely love it. I love how you describe everything, and it's just so mysterious. And now we have this Peter guy who I'm thinking may be the guy in Ivy's dreams! I think I'm definitely going to subscribe because I want to see where this goes. It's just so fascinating. Oh also, I love the background information you give. You give plenty of information without boring the reader with it all. Very nice job on this!

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Your summary is perfection. It really draws you in. People really underestimate the importance of a prologue and yours is great. Your word choice and description is just utter brilliance. You are such a talented writer. Wonderful job!

Finally a story I could get into. I for one, am in love with the setting itself, and have quite the biased towards creative names(which you nailed). Although I'm not quite in to the whole werewolf seen as much as I was years prior, I find that you have made a fantastic decision of re imagining them back into a more 'realistic' atmosphere. The only problem that I had was how choppy some of the sentences were. I know they're there to bring more of a tense, obscure scene, but I felt as though I was brought out of story from it. Otherwise, it's a great read.

Finally a story I could get into. I for one, am in love with the setting itself, and have quite the biased towards creative names(which you nailed). Although I'm not quite in to the whole werewolf seen as much as I was years prior, I find that you have made a fantastic decision of re imagining them back into a more 'realistic' atmosphere. The only problem that I had was how choppy some of the sentences were. I know they're there to bring more of a tense, obscure scene, but I felt as though I was brought out of story from it. Otherwise, it's a great read.

Finally a story I could get into. I for one, am in love with the setting itself, and have quite the biased towards creative names(which you nailed). Although I'm not quite in to the whole werewolf seen as much as I was years prior, I find that you have made a fantastic decision of re imagining them back into a more 'realistic' atmosphere. The only problem that I had was how choppy some of the sentences were. I know they're there to bring more of a tense, obscure scene, but I felt as though I was brought out of story from it. Otherwise, it's a great read.

First of all, the layout is fantastic, the sepia picture is just the right amount of intrigue and subtle enough to draw a reader in. Your description is perfect, you paint glorious pictures, and there's just enough detail to allow the reader to take some control too. The plot seems fantastic too, I think this is really going to grow into something great.

This is brilliant! The writing is fantastic, and the characters are greatly developed as well. I do agree with xxemergencyy, you should look into making a character page. It would give the story that extra something more. :D

But other wise, the story is well written, the plot is excellent, and I can't wait to see more! :D

One more thing, maybe try making a charater page? They're pretty useful(I think). It'll give more than just the pictures at the bottom of your summary. You don't have to, of course, but I feel like it's a little easier on the reader. I think it's easier for us to see what you're character is like, and I like that. Of course you could be going for the mysterious characters, if so... disregard that comment. :)