Don't Tell, I Beg. - Comments

Oh my flipping gawd, you updated right after I read the first chapter! I FRIGGEN LOVE YOU RIGHT NOW.

Awwwwwwwww. So cute. <3

Ohh lala got me interested again. God all yours stroies are so good.

Btw i know you said there will be no Joel in this story but it would be kinda interesting if parker went to live with the two of them and they were kinda like parents.... idk maybe its a stupid idea.
But anyways how old is Parker?

I like Parker. I'm also incredibly interested on how this will play out and if we'll get anymore insight on the Hell that was the Jones household.

AHHHHHHHHHHHHH! Update please! PLEASE!

Wow.
I read this and was so disappointed when it ended. It is the best thing I have read here on mibba - the writing is so good. Simply done, with subtle description and I was really interested in Parker And wanted to know more...so I'm now going to read the prequel. It was really good! I will definitely continue reading this :)

wow, i really like this. i'm new to this series (bad choice of words but you know what i mean), and i really like what you've done with it. i'm really intrigued to read what happens next, and to check out the prequel too! i love the way you introduce characters, it was especially good with that right at the start. <3

Hello from Comment Swap. I have to say that I like your story idea! It's quite different from others and the way you lay it out is clear and easy to read. You make sure to add enough detail and describe your character quite well. Overall I think it's pretty decent although not the type of story I would go for. So thank comment swap for that. :)

whoo new story! so excited!

I'm quite interested by this story. I'm going to check out the prequel because I'm interested by this character. I like your writing style, and I like the little world you've created, I felt like I was there as a bystander, which is a sign of good writing, surely? Also, I like that the layout does not make it difficult to read, there are so many awful layouts round and about the place that it's refreshing to see just a plain, simple one that works and compliments the story well :).

Hello there :) First of all, I don't agree at all with the comment below. Your story is absolutely amazing. I like your descriptions, they don't make me get bored and they are really interesting.

Since this is a sequel I better check the prequel too. It must be pretty good from what I think.

Keep up the great work and share your imagination with me and your fans. XD

I don't really understand how your layout really connects with the story. But your choice and it's not obnoxious to read the text so well done. The weird shift from large font in the summary to smaller font on the chapters is odd though.

Your writing is very different, for lack of a better word. I feel like "cookie cutter" would be a good phrase to describe it with. You don't include many details and visions. Like when he's in the kitchen, you can explain what it looks like. Does it have a breakfast bar? Is it granite counter tops? Does Parker like it or no?

I'm also confused about Parker himself. If he thinks that he's too scrawny, then he should probably think about going to the doctor and getting help with that. At 5'5'', the recommended weight is 125 pounds, so he's extremely underweight. "Sickly pale hand" is a phrase that bothers me because he can fix this, yet refuses to.

Also, your chapter feels lumped together. It's all kinda smushed, where I feel like you're chapters should be him talking with his "parents," him getting acquianted with the school, and then his breakdown.

I just feel like you have the potential, but you're not using it to your fullest. You just need to slow down. Honestly, it feels like you're trying to develop Parker entirely in one chapter and that's not going to happen. Although I do encourage you to keep writing, I will not be subscribing.

Ah that poor sweetie! I can't wait for the next bit, I'm already in love with it, like all your other stories!!!

Ah that poor sweetie! I can't wait for the next bit, I'm already in love with it, like all your other stories!!!

parker, here is your virtual hug!

(Comment Swap) what's 'slash'?
The layout doesn't quite feel right.
(Chapter 1)
Too much of the 'cookie cutter', for me.
Just can't quite conect to either the story, or the characters I come across.
There still are a few details to tend to.
Were you writing too fast to see what you were writing?
Trying to hard to paint a picture of the character, in a single chapter, when I feel they are not to be mixed up.
The history, the new home, and going to school, feels like entirely separate chapters to me.
Never quite getting into either.
Doesn't matter how big a mystery his life is to him, you need to make sence of him, to the readers.

What's with that comment?
besides, either way, don't rub it in.
you want people to leave?

I absolutely adored Desirablly Hateful and Your Body is a Wonderland, and I have a feeling that I'm going to fall in love with this story also. I'm interested to see why Parker acts the way he does and everything. I wasn't expecting him to freak out that way. I can't wait until you introduce Noah! I love the way you write. You have your own style and it's unique but also just plain great. This story is just getting started and I'm very very intrigued to see what you have in store for the two boys. :) Love this!

I absolutely adored Desirablly Hateful and Your Body is a Wonderland, and I have a feeling that I'm going to fall in love with this story also. I'm interested to see why Parker acts the way he does and everything. I wasn't expecting him to freak out that way. I can't wait until you introduce Noah! I love the way you write. You have your own style and it's unique but also just plain great. This story is just getting started and I'm very very intrigued to see what you have in store for the two boys. :) Love this!

So comment swap bought me here. I'm liking this story even for a just one chapter. It keeps my attention the whole time reading it. I like your way of writing and would love for you to continue this. I might consider even reading the stories before this. ^.^

So stoked for more!