Concerning the Young Man in the Woods... - Comments

@ mazohyst
Yay~

@ MysticSongbird
Somehow I overlooked the journal thing. OTL Ignore my tilde comment then~ (yay use of tildes).

@ mazohyst
Oh, I didn't notice those...
I copy-pasted from word, and I'll try and find the missing puncuation...
and, I'm sorry, I try and avoid that but, I think I may have been a bit tired at the time I wrote that, and thus, not paying attention ^_^; I'll fix that, don't worry

as for the tilde, I used it to represent a sort of sing-song goin' on there. After all, it's in context of somebody writing it in a journal...still, good advice.

and, I'm sorry about the layout but, I don't know how to change it...

Okay, good news...
Thanks ^_^ I always try and give my characters personality, for fear that they're boring/flat/static/absolute-and-total-uninteresting-sues.

Overall, thanks, and I'll be sure to try and fix those problems that might be driving people away ^_^

Oh Mystic, I'm liking this! Your writing definitely has so much personality. Agatha is just oozing with it. I don't really know what to say other than there are some missing punctuation and capitalized letters and spaces here and there but nothing that can't be fixed. The phrase "matched up" was used twice in one paragraph and somehow that irked me for some reason but that's just me. I don't like the use of tildes in literature. I don't think it's used properly in this context. Generally, tildes are used as an approximation symbol. Using tildes in casual conversation is fine but not in writing, at least that's my opinion.

This doesn't have to do with the writing itself but for some reason I find it really hard to read because of the layout. Maybe use a different font or a different font size? Also your quotation marks are weird looking because you copied and pasted from Word. XD Word is stupid, it does that with symbols and stuff. It's a pain to fix but it'll be easier on the reader's eyes.

Overall, I really liked this! I'm definitely excited to read more of it! Hopefully some other users will give you more guided advice though.