A Mouse Named Rupert - Comments

But I LIKE detail!
I get your point, though. I like short fanfics that kind of wrap everything up most.

@ Cerith99
That's why you don't get short stories, they don't have much detail.

I don't like short stories, but I'd like it if this became a series. What's so important about October 3rd, 2030? Who is Barney the owl? I didn’t really understand. I like stories with detail and foreshadowing if possible. That’s why I don’t really like short stories. If you did make it longer somehow, I’d like to see the details. I mean, what’s even the relationship between Barney and Rupert? Where are they? I got so confused!

@ YoungandLoadedKid
Yeah I add no idea how to make a mouse know the year so apparently that's going to be the new end of the year! =p

@ xCosmo
Thank you! Hahaha, my english teacher burst out laughing and my classmates were jealous and/or confused LOL

I also forgot to add that how can you make poor little Rupert the mouse! You can already tell that he is adorable. It will be fun to see how the series would go about. Oh yeah I was confused about the people yelling is October and the year 2030 thing. What was that all about? Lol. I mean was it done intentionally? Or was it just way of you telling us that this is the year Rupert lives in? Hahaha I don't know I'm just here making things more difficult.
Sorry I forgot to add this so yeah awesome :)

This got recommended by Comment Swap and I have to say it made me laugh. It was short, but simple and funny. So the only way to end this comment is to say a job well-done on making up laugh. :)

After reading through the comments, I'm comforted to know my reaction to this, as well as my reason for discovering it, were common. Reccomended by the Comment Swap feature, and I have to say despite my initial confusion, this made me giggle. Poor Rupert, its so hard leading a little mousey life. If you decided to write an equally as amusing, equally as short sequel, I'd be pleased.

@ Kirsten Elizabeth;
Rupert is the best character ever, which is why I'm continuing this story! Stay tuned!

@ DeceptiveInnocence
Yeah, I added a note at the end explaining that he DID make it, but Barney didn't =p

@ NyssaNightmare
Oh, he did make it, it was Barney that died LOL

@ karen's evil twin
Thanks! Yeah well, the mouse doesn't understand either, all he wants is to get away from Barney!

@ Jar Of Hearts;
Thank you! Our teacher wanted us to make a layout for a story in five minutes, but I ended up having enough time to write it down. That's why the ending is so rushed LOL "HURRY HURRY HURRY OMG OK MILITARY TRUCK."

Hello, I got this for comment swap, and I was really really confused when I read it. It made me laugh though, in a good way, for only a short paragraph you described everything pretty well, and the ending was so random I laughed, and then felt bad for the poor mouse. Your grammar and spelling is perfect, as far as I can see, so good job. I liked it though, very entertaining! The layout is nice too. This was very unique, haven't seen anything like it.

Hi there, comment swap. You seem to get these a lot! I was really confused when I got this as a story, and then even more confused when it was so short a story. But it was interesting nonetheless. Curt is a good word to describe this. I don't much understand what the humans were all in a tizzy about, but I felt bad for the poor mouse. It was good, though.

lol! This was quite an interesting short story, I actually liked the comedy in it. Definitly not what you would expect.A story of a mousename Rupert who couldn't win, haha, but told in such a way that was just absolutely hilarious. The details were great,and as incredibly short it was, it still managed to make me laugh out loud. Great writing,keep it up!

Little me from Comment Swap.
Well I did not expect this from the title at all.I was giggling for a moment then got sad once I saw that little Rupert didn't make it.Stupid owl could hae just left Rupert alone then Rupert would still be alive:( I'm such a dork when it comes to stories.Unique idea by the way:)

Here from comment swap! But after I read this I literally laughed out loud, I was definitely not expecting it to end like that. I love that you gave the animals names and almost a personality for Rupert. Very well written :)

"Ended with a smash" hahahahaha. I'm still chuckling.

@ Shiznit
*shrugs* maybe they were getting attacked by a giant marshmallow from outer space?

probably. =p

~Brought to you by comment swap~
I thought this was interesting; I like getting the story from what the mouse is seeing and hearing. I do hope, actually, that you make this a series or write a short story explaining more, because I'm really interested to know what the humans were talking about and why tjere was a military truck and such.